MAY 17, 2011 7:40PM

The Diary of Wretched Lolita Lalonde - Wednesday Fiction

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Once on a dark winter’s day, when the yellow fog hung so thick and heavy in the streets of London that the lamps were lighted and the shop windows blazed with gas as they do at night, an odd-looking young woman sat in a cab with her husband and was driven rather slowly through the big thoroughfares.

 

Her mother had just died and she announced to her husband that they must perform a final journey to complete her mother's past life. Lolita looked just like her mother and she knew she would eventually inherit her husband’s wealth as he was quite ill. Her mother had begun as servant for his family and had worked hard to stay alive.

 

Lolita had been an only child when the sickness came over London and watched her grandmother die. She roamed the streets until the cook came from the main house to take her under her wing. She was brought to where her mother worked and she got Lolita employed to bring in the coal with the younger boys. It was a dirty job and one day she became so filthy that the cook had her remove her woven cotton dress to be cleaned.

 

Upon removing the dress the cook saw a gold ring hanging on a pink ribbon around Lolita’s neck. She immediately clutched it in her hand and ran outside while the cook tried to chase her down. The cook was too slow and Lolita hid among the tall gladiolas until the coast was clear. She clutched the ring even tighter as her grandmother said it was the only thing of value left and to guard it with her life.

Lolita peered at the grounds through the foliage and wondered where to hide it. She eventually climbed a tall tree and slid it down a thin branch. There it gleamed close to the trunk where it stayed for years while the tree grew around it. When Lolita was eighteen years old she married the son of the family she worked for and became a woman of wealth.

Even though she had everything she wanted she still glanced out the window everyday to see if the ring was still on the branch of the tree. By this time all she could see was a glimmer of that ring because the tree had consumed most of it with age.

Now her mother had died and she needed the ring back to complete her life. She saw the arborists in the yard as their cab pulled into the driveway,  and then watched them slowly cut down the tree. As they carefully pulled down the branch with the ring she smiled. She had done her job and now it was time.

The workman handed her the ring that she had hid away all these years. It was really the only thing that mattered to her and she had kept it safe like she promised.

Lolita was now finally complete and ready to continue the journey that her Grandmother had started.

 


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That tree had one more ring than its years told. :)

Nice read.
A completed cycle!!!
Yes it did Blinddream
I am afraid there will be more entries satori.
What a unique hiding place!! Great read.
Welcome to the fiction group!
Rated
Thank you Susie. I am quite excited to be here.
Not what I was expecting, but I liked it. Rated
The ring belonged to her mother? I'm not sure why it was so important. What am I missing? More to come? I like the vintage style and the diary entry format seems to make it very real.
Lolita

safe from the sickness that struck the poor

coming from her mother's funearal

(her mother not so priveleged)

felt the need to reclaim the only

remembrance ( a gold token) of

her matriarch - ancestory.

The journey of Lolita Lolande then

here-to-after....

behold great things to come
yes Zanelle, more to come!

Ume: Maybe good and maybe bad things
Wow - I love this - the ambiance, the fairy-tale like idea of the ring - spooky and beautiful and very, very intriguing. Will there be more stories from Lolita's diary?

Great job with writing a story around the sentence (changed a little and very well), which comes from "A Little Princess" by Frances Hodgson Burnett.

Thanks for participating in Fiction Wednesday - and for a great read!
Alysa: yes more to come and thank you
Historical fiction. Cool. Nicely done.
Thank you Rei!
So pleased ro be on here and partake
A story where important things are kept safe "Out on a limb."
I'm thrilled to see there will be more to follow.
R
What ume said.
I'm looking forward to whatever comes...
I read this yesterday but OS was choking, so I couldn't comment on how quickly you set the mood and location. I also really liked that a tree was entrusted with the ring. You could go back and expand on that, I'm sure. That Lolita was now "complete" only raises more questions. And what of her coming journey?....
/R
Yes Ash and Just another Aj.. More to come tomorrow.:)
What a wonderful story, I am eagerly awaiting more.
On to #2. Good Stuff!
It's going to be an interesting journey, full of surprises, I'm sure.

Nice write!