Caroline Marie

caroline marie

caroline marie
Location
northern city, United States
Birthday
July 24
Title
Temperamental Story Teller
Bio
posts will tell

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NOVEMBER 21, 2010 4:22PM

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a thin sheet of ice covers everything outside so walking the dog could be dangerous and I will stay under the covers looking out the window as everything sparkles

what if there was a thin sheet of ice covering everything from now until forever and so I could happily stay inside always with all the pressure to fully live removed

whales in the arctic swim in a circle taking turns for air under one break in the ice like sufis slow motion whirling under the one hole all winter long with their big brains capable of complex thought but are they thinking or in a meditative trance no one will ever know

two romanian cousins isolated in their home with tin can lids nailed to the floor in dazzling geometric arrays and colorful tiny polka dots painted on every surface, wall and furniture and homemade beaded curtains hanging all around never to be seen by anyone

cloistered nuns in prayer day after day after day in silence except for beautiful medieval chanting and their realizations, their nirvana dies with their bodies unless of course it is just mundane thoughts of that sister is bugging me but we can imagine the best

the world inside that womans head could free my narrow mind but she will not share it

the world inside my head is covered in a melting sheet of ice so close to letting me feel it all, really feel the sharp, cold air inside outside but with night the sheet refreezes crusting everything immobile

 

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bump, indeed. Would you believe this is one of my absolute favorite things you've ever written? I have read it more than once and I know I'm not done yet. ~r
Freezing, melting, refreezing--sounds ambivalent--the safety of the ice is a very unique metaphor--fascinating.
what a great story in verse....I loved it. Stories in verse....Homer, et al.





stop the advance of the 451s
The polka dots..:)
Loved this and rated with hugs
This is beautiful caroline. I love the images and the ice. I will read this again and again.
Very visual. Chilly. Good stuff here.
Wonderful and amazing. Thank you.
That last paragrapha really made me think. As I'm sitting here watching the first snow of the year come down outside my window. But it won't stay. I tmight freeze tonight but will be gone by tomorrow. There is much to think about here, Caroline.
So beautiful. I'm glad you got to enjoy and savor this moment of peace. I hope things are getting better, and if they're not, I hope you can keep this moment inside you and go to it in little stolen nips of time. Good luck to you, and thanks for some really lovely writing. R.
This is weird and strange, definitely love it. My mind going in lots of arcs and lines right now, geometric over linear, so that there is more room for meditative circles later.
Love this; love the movement, the rhythm, the voice, the message. Exquisite. R
So different I had to read it over twice. So visual, just wow..
Frozen and beautiful. I can feel the ice and chill. rated
this weaves and turns and draws me into the circle you draw with words. i can feel the icy water and the rhythm of going around and around. excellent piece.
nicely done. as long as everyone is safe and fed, let the frost come and stay cozy and melt whatever needs melting. this is one of my faves and so poetic too.
Caroline, this was quite something. It is such a provocative portrait of the interior of your mind. Lovely..
How did you DO this? That sheet of ice sometimes keeps me inside, immobile, imagining the world but not quite taking part in it. I am awed by these images...and the thoughts behind them...
I sometimes have trouble relating to stream of consciousness writing, because it is so personal and "in the moment". And I understand as well as respect when you say: "the world inside that womans head could free my narrow mind but she will not share it".
I really like this. Like Joan, I need to read more than once. It has a wonderful circular feel.