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While the ashes of marriage #2 were cooling, I began a journal here in verse, to keep myself out of trouble. So far so good, and one day at a time. I took a hiatus this past January, and I missed it terribly. Writing daily had changed the way I think - not my opinions, but the process of thinking itself. So here I am back again, and hungry. I began with three rules: (1) Iambic pentameter, (2) Perfect rhyme, and (3) It had to be true (no hyperbole). I hereby amend rule number 3: If I'm writing about myself, yes, it has to be true. But it doesn't, if I want to tell a story.

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JUNE 8, 2010 12:17AM

Talisman. Monday June 7, 2010

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I ran this morning.  Nothing too severe,
Three miles.  While I was out, my daughter called.
She needed her viola.  It was here.
It was, I think, informally installed
To conjure up a physical connection
From here to her.  I swear she planned it out:
The ride to school would see some misdirection,
For reasons none of us could fight about.
She's jealous of her feelings, and she's clever.
These sorts of tricks just might go on forever.

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Darling. That's the first word that came to my mind when I read this post. Then, I began to wonder about my choice of that word. It doesn't seem to be a word that a macho man like myself would even use. So, I analyzed it. The dictionary gives charming and very pleasing as synonyms. I realized that my choice of that word was focused on your daughter - and her little ruse. Then, I understood that that was your point in the first place! Duh! So, I stand by my description of your poem: it's darling!
I remember those phone calls, the missing > that was so needed. It always got me right to the core.
from here to her... very nice.
Rated for the insight of seeing the rhythm in "informally" and "misdirection." I enjoy your word study so! The fruits of it for us are well worth savoring.
I love Pilgrim's comment. Sometimes I wonder if the language of your day always, naturally falls into iambic pentameter. It always seems so comfortable as I read. I love the conjuring of a physical connection. Even more, I love the smile I hear in your voice as you observe it.
"she's clever.
These sorts of tricks just might go on forever."

well, at least until she starts to date, then the lucky boy will start to benefit...
What anna1liese said - I can just hear you thinking, DB, in iambic pentameter. And to quote dlv, the "macho man" himself, this WAS darling. "Informally installed" so sweet.
DB, I love your work.

I've done many of those jaunts (lunch boxes, homework, a violin).

I haven't tried to do proper poetry like you do, with meter and rhyme, for many years. When I read your work, I'm reminded of my favorite Robert Frost quote: "Writing free verse is like playing tennis with the net down." You write so beautifully with the net firmly up. Bravo.
Great way for kids to need you and get your attention -- say they left something and would you bring it. But they don't like to admit that the need is there....not cool in front of their friends....
I just re-read the Superman poem where you "save" your ex from the bat. Reminds me of this -- when in trouble, your family knows who to call. Your ex just tends to not continue the love and attention when she don't need you to do a job for her...