Shared Custody (A Triolet). Tuesday Aug 10, 2010

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Divorce Bard

Location: pretty how town, USA
Birthday: February 13

Bio: While the ashes of marriage #2 were cooling, I began a journal here in verse, to keep myself out of trouble. So far so good, and one day at a time. I took a hiatus this past January, and I missed it terribly. Writing daily had changed the way I think - not my opinions, but the process of thinking itself. So here I am back again, and hungry. I began with three rules: (1) Iambic pentameter, (2) Perfect rhyme, and (3) It had to be true (no hyperbole). I hereby amend rule number 3: If I'm writing about myself, yes, it has to be true. But it doesn't, if I want to tell a story.

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AUGUST 11, 2010 12:17AM

Rate: 9 Flag

She picked the kids up shortly after eight.
Then I came in and worked, then went to bed.
I knew the evening couldn't go too late.
She picked the kids up shortly after eight.
They always leave me in a dreamy state,
With echoes of them fading in my head.
She picked the kids up shortly after eight.
Then I came in and worked, then went to bed.

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rated for echoes.r

hugs, me

August 11, 2010 12:20 AM

I give up on poetry and am grateful to those who do..:)
Rated with hugs

Linda Seccaspina

August 11, 2010 12:31 AM

May you dream sweet dreams when you are asleep
And wake to a bright new day when you peep

Little Kate

August 11, 2010 12:35 AM

Perfect as always, DB. And sweet.

froggy

August 11, 2010 12:55 AM

Sweet and wistful.

ladyslipper

August 11, 2010 01:58 AM

I find I am falling in love with the form of the triolet each time I read one by you. Jan spoke yesterday about the shifting context and he is right. It is as though you use slightly different shades as you enrich and then complete the picture of these moments and of these strictures, structures that accompany your time with your children. I am most struck here by lines five and six: "They always leave me in a dreamy state, With echoes of them fading in my head." Perhaps these poems of your year will allow you precise and vivid memories of moments shared and of love understood.

anna1liese

August 11, 2010 07:37 AM

Another sweet one. R-

Dave Rickert

August 11, 2010 08:08 AM

Another heartfelt slice of life, DB. Beautiful

trilogy

August 11, 2010 01:32 PM

Hi everyone. Posting a little early tonight... but that's okay, I have to get back to work in a few minutes. Busy busy BUSY.

hugs ~ Thank you. You've really been coming in first, these last couple of nights. Be careful, I could grow to depend on it.

Linda ~ If you will be grateful, I will never, ever stop.

Kate ~ That is possibly the cutest couplet anyone has ever written for me.

froggy ~ Thanks. Thanks for coming by, as always.

ladyslipper ~ oh wait till you see what I have to say about YOUR triolet!

(* * * Everyone go see ladyslipper's triolet RIGHT NOW. * * *)

anna1 ~ You hit several nails on the head there. I am really fascinated by this form (thank you, mhold) because it is so very rigid. And yes, Jan's observation was spot on. Honestly, this triolet is not as effective in shifting the meaning as the last one ("Thinking"). And lines five and six are very, very demanding. And yes, the poems are all making very crystalline memories for me. Thank you sincerely, for your continued reading and observation.

Dave ~ I always feel "tapped" somehow, when you drop by. Thanks for stopping in. I'm glad you liked it.

trilogy ~ My gosh trilogy, I think you've read every last one of them, haven't you. Thank you.

I am thrilled by everyone's continued responses. Thank you all for coming by. Please continue to do so. I'll continue to do my best here.

You're all the greatest.