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While the ashes of marriage #2 were cooling, I began a journal here in verse, to keep myself out of trouble. So far so good, and one day at a time. I took a hiatus this past January, and I missed it terribly. Writing daily had changed the way I think - not my opinions, but the process of thinking itself. So here I am back again, and hungry. I began with three rules: (1) Iambic pentameter, (2) Perfect rhyme, and (3) It had to be true (no hyperbole). I hereby amend rule number 3: If I'm writing about myself, yes, it has to be true. But it doesn't, if I want to tell a story.

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AUGUST 11, 2010 10:44PM

Office (A Triolet). Wednesday Aug 11, 2010

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There's something that I really need to say.
Oh, nuts -- hang on, I gotta take a call...
...I'm back.  You there?  Oh good.  So anyway,
There's something that I really need to say.
That argument we had the other day?
You thought I wasn't being fair at all.
There's something that I really need to say.
Oh, nuts -- hang on, I gotta take a call.

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This is the most natural triolet I've read so far. Very clever ! ~R
Down to earth and fun - THANKS!
I agree with FunSunA! Very natural. Very office-y too!
You are just so good...I run out of words.
Sad but true stories.... we speak even in poetry when we are dissing others... Donald Rumsfeld was onto something. It lulls you and then you don't know... R
There's something that I really need to say
You're THE best at these Triolets, DB!
Beautifully done. Somehow reminiscent of Menotti's "The Telephone".
I love the way this flows. A perfect marriage of subject and form.
Love this. Rings so true. How much is lost by the ringing of that bell?
You people are just the best. Every single one of you.

FusunA - thank you. Natural is a place I really try to be -- sometimes it works, sometimes it doesn't. I'm happy you found this one successful. And it's always a great pleasure to see you here.

Kit - thanks and, you're welcome. I'm glad you liked it. I have a genuine fondness for the everyday.

mhold - I owe all of these to you. Thank you for your post from last week. I am very pleased that you liked this one. (And as brutal as the office telephone is to relationships, I'm surprised everyone hasn't been divorced seven times.)

tril - thank you for your wonderful compliment. I will not make little of it, because you are very sweet. But you know, I do have extra time on my hands. Lots of it. (And no TV.)

Oryoki - That's what you get when you use a language. And yes, if Mr. Rumsfeld had become a poet, things would be very, very different today.

Kate - from the other side of the world. You are very kind. I don't know though... now that I've seen this form, I have to read a thousand of them. There are probably other bests out there. But thank you.

Jan - What a marvelous piece of music. I accompanied a friend's performance of it as an undergraduate. And I had forgotten it completely. Thanks for the reminder.

ladyslipper - that is a very high compliment, to someone who considers himself a literal-minded formalist. Thank you.

anna1 - I'm glad you enjoyed it. And the answer is plenty, I think. I've hated trying to explain myself on the telephone since my early twenties.

Thank you all so much for coming by, as always. You just make it all so much fun.
A fine foray into evasion. I like the relaxed smoothness you've employed in this old French form.