Hells Bells

Hells Bells
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Book editor, parent, MFA in poetry from a land far, far, away--and a long, long time ago . . . I'm not a psychologist, but I play one on TV.

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MARCH 2, 2010 9:47PM

Five Words in a Poem, Feels Like Sestina to Me

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I never knew what caused the raging fire--

Only, whoever started it was cloaked

By something more than blankness, like the kiss

Of gasoline on wood, on flesh, the spit

Of tiny, licking flame, thrust high then far.  

Dangle a challenge to write a poem involving five words, and a sixth begs to follow, and the whole lot just wants to be a sestina. It would be a real challenge to fit these five words, plus a sixth, into this complicated but ultimately liberating form.

I wrote the first five lines, in iambic pentameter of course (because it just makes me sound so darn good):

  • a-fire
  • b-cloak
  • c-kiss
  • d-spit
  • e-far
  • f-[?]

If I went on, I'd add that sixth word, then five more stanzas, patterned like this:

  • faebdc
  • cfdabe
  • ecbfad
  • deacfb
  • bdfeca

And the "envoi," a final three lines with these three terminal words:

  • eca

 Paul Fussell, Jr., author of Poetic Meter and Poetic Form, says the sestina is "of dubious expressive value in English."

And you'll see just how wrong he is.

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The adjective "ordinary" would be tough, but ultimately rewarding, as a sixth word. You'd have to really pretzel yourself to get the words on the page. Who knows what would come out?
This is like a little poetry seminar. Thank you!
A treat. Your verse. The review. Bishop's Sestina. (wow) I feel like I've been in a nook sharing with a friend. Thanks HB.
Thank you Hells Bells, I am just opening to different forms of writing. I admire your writing.
i like the elizabeth bishop poem, and i liked your poem.
I think I just fell in love...
Five little words..
Wording a feeling ..Silence...wording...
Very nice
the Bishop poem is breathtaking, I had not read it before.. thank you.
Hells Bells,
This was simply wonderful. Thank you so much.
I think I slept through that lecture on meter when I was in poetry class. Glad to know there was someone out there who didn't. No kidding, the pattern is great. I am just too exhausted to think enough to try it.
Gosh, you are such a show off! And for good reason.
Beautiful. Thank you for reminding me of Sestina by Elizabeth Bishop - one of my favorites. Best.
Poetry (and it's value) is in the ear of the beholder. Yours sizzled. :)
I admire so much you who are true poets.
Wonderful use of the five words and enjoyed the two suggested sestina very much.
Thank you for these gifts, so inspired and so well crafted.
I knew none of this so thank you! Poems are new to me and wow there are so many different ways to "poem". Well done!
I loved the poem but do I have to know the rest of the stuff for the test? ;)
Thanks, all, for stopping by and for putting up with my "going teacher" on you like this. I think I've been happiest when standing in front of a captive audience of undergraduates.
Marvelous. What Lea said. I'd never encountered a sestina before, so this was a great learning experience for me.

Many many thanks. Love the poem, extremely well done.
Bells, I just read Elizabeth Bishop's Sestina last week. I've been trying to study some poetry "forms" because I thought that the discipline of that would get me to find my "voice". I am LOVING this whole OS Poetry revival, even if it only lasts a few days. My first one was my Villanelle and I'm working on a sonnet. I love the idea of "Challenges" on different forms.
Great stuff!! Really enjoyed this!
Bells - Interesting that, especially in this century, anyone would accuse a whole FORM of having "dubious expressive value in English". By my experience, the form itself never has any expressive value whatsoever. It's utterly abstracted from meaning and syntax.

On the other hand, it's a French form (originally), and French doesn't use the tonic accents that English does -- they mean nothing to French speakers, and the French are perfectly comfortable putting the indefinite article in a position that in English would require stress. Drives me nuts.

But by some quirk of the accents, they may be more comfortable with a Sestina (and I am more comfortable with the Sonnet, when I can actually get one out in a single day.) And I do require that a form feel comfortable, because the rhyme and meter are a bitch.
HB, I think I'll remember it this time, just enough to mess it up, anyway. It's amazing what an open call will do. Yes, Fussell was wrong. Poets can always screw up a satisfying declaration. Thanks.
If I had read this one first, I wouldn't have been silly enough to put the comment on your most recent post! Ah well. I will look up these poems.
I continue to return here and enjoy this. Thank you.