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JUNE 2, 2009 10:51PM

Thor and I

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Crimson fog fakes an orgasm with the black skyline in the distance.

The lurching spasms progress into pillow talk.

An acid bath greets the populace coming home that evening.

Egos spin between with winged serpents flying overhead,

swimming in ragged rivulets of flame that inter-spear the fog.

With staccato thrums of soot and heat; stretching Hephastus -

soon to smelt Mjollnir.

 

Odin’s side desire for mortal immortality,

The essence dance with She,

He partakes,

A Son is given light.

 

Hung by his spear

To the world tree he bleeds,

poetry and wisdom,

through nine days instead.

 

He learned of the runes

and the songs that would lead,

Humankind’s imagination,

To skies un-tethered, sans reality

To realms of nine

seen by the blind

and cyclopean eyes.

 

Unto us the rage is born,

protector of the weak and innocent.

Given to He is strength unbound,

made twice and again by Megingjard.

 

Hand to hammer wed,

duty unto death,

The hero’s path.

Walk alight,

the lightning ride,

on goats astride -

steel chariot.

 

As the Jormungand coils the worlds unto itself head to tail,

tail to head an infinite loop, doubled,

It wakes for Ragnarok.

For what is infinity doubled

but doubt redoubled unto itself?

 

Swift to strike –

a poison bite.

Quicker still -

the judgment steel.

 

Mercurial herald of forgiveness.

Hammer judges doubt time and again,

A mangled mess remains,

With bloodied maw,

And dreams of malice -

from Midgard Serpent,

holding the chalice,

It strikes again, to poison him.

Valhalla barren,

The Son returns.

 

On the final day of imagination,

no longer time,

run out of mind.

Have we soon to forget existence,

was ever tied to earth and stone?

 

- far we have flown;

to become these old yellowed bones -

 

Waiting.

 

Ezequiel and She take notice one day, as the earth spins.

Ragnorok’s knell and din,

now spread thin,

a memory;

forgotten, save by the bones now littering the valley.

 

Where solace they’ll have none,

Prophet of She, now comes

to see what he needs shown,

to grow what now needs sown.

 

Belief, Faith and Trust -

know that I Am and hear me roar.

Lion of Zion, Serpent overthrown,

coiled reptilian wreaths

Fall free and be trod underfoot by me,

the new creation – Gestates

and Creates!

 

By flesh to bone now jaded,

Souls called back in native tongue,

Sinew of ceremony binds,

to bone and muscle wed,

and life pronounced to live as one -

sure to see the rising sun.

Witness the union that none will ever

tear asunder. 

 

Prophet of He speak to the wind that it may listen -

to calls he bade

be made

to the four corners –

and breathe Life into shells of flesh,

again to rise and remember.

 

Fortune smiled,

and hope recovered in a box,

Fury gone;

Life’s protector missing.

 

Strength abounds from hammer still,

Belt to wait, The seeker’s thrill

of home and harmony.

 

Will one soon come to lift Mjollnir?

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A bit long - but it's a poem rant... if you will lol.

*bow* and peece, even if it's out of style.
a rant.... yes. a poem... certainly.... nordic-mythical rhythmic genius.
--rated--
I like this - I'll have to come back when I'm fully awake and not procrastinating on psychology discussions, to be sure I actually comprehended it.

Consider your blog bookmarked for less busy (and tired) times...I've got to get back into poetry myself, really...
Rated :)
Thank you, Mr. Mustard - your welcome comments are a balm, Sir. I've always admired the Thor character in mythology, almost like a Jesus except with a hammer.... :P and the fact that he dies for reality and not for humankind - but kinda the same. He dies of the serpent's poison bite during Ragnarok (Armageddon without meteors lol).

I had fun, and really enjoyed just putting it down. It is a departure from my usual subjects; perhaps indulgent, but enjoyed. I welcome critic of all kinds. I understand it is a bit raw, so if you feel inclined to help or flame lol, it is appreciated.

peece!
dj
Wow! That is beautiful. So many emotions. I loved it.
Great job!
DasAlterEgo - thanks, man! looking forward to reading more of your posts and am happy to see you drop by. I'll hold you to it and see you later. I'll be doing likewise.

Peece!
dj
fireeyes24 - thank you for visiting, so happy you liked it - peece!
dj
My eldest son has a dog named Thor.... he is nothing like this! Too bad really... This Thor seems much more interesting.

Four corners huh? Should prove to be interesting. For whatever reason, I hear of people meeting there when "it" hits.... time will tell, I guess.
Brother, your talent knows no bounds - this is ambitious and impressive - way to let it loose!
but it tis a beautiful rant. such movement and beat!
MAWB - thank you for coming by :) Thor is interesting even as a name. hmm... calling to the four corners - as ancient as our ancestors. When "it" hits it will be love. that or I got the wrong letter in which case I will return to sender lol. Thank you for the kind comment!

Owl_Says_Who *hugz* thank you for your words and thoughts always.

Scupper! I am happy to hear you felt it :)

peece!
dj
peece!
dj
Beware Loki! :)

Nice poem
Mr e - thank you much for dropping in :) and agreed :D about Low-key and Wednesday as it concerns Shadow (Thor) in "American Gods" - Neil gaiman
This rules...mange tak!! I'm gonna put on some Wagner now...
It reminds me of a story within a poem. It's very lyrical! Wonderful piece, and it's really good!!
scoubidou - thank you too and i appreciate the visit :)

Luis! thank you for droping by, I am happy you like it :) It is more a story than a poem. I was trying to meld the mythic with some of the more accepted american stories in the bible, like the valley of bones as another 'genesis' and making them more transparent because of that melding.

Peece!
dj
Never too long when telling a good story like this one.
Thank you, zashin - *hugz*

peece,
dj
A modern saga, Jimenace! Have you ever read any of the Icelandic sagas? Parts of your poem reminded me of their pounding, relentless rhythm.

Kudos from a fan of Norse mythology!
Absolutely beautiful and majestic piece. I'm taking a break to read it and thus cannot give it its full due. For now I'm only able to assess its aesthetic quality, and I cannot recall having read anything this long with such a flowing lyrical quality, it takes an extraordinary artist to create a work of such complexity, yet with such flowing beauty. I also sense a lot of meaning in it, and will read it a few times to digest it fully. Looking forward to mythos’ assessment of it though.
Wow..I loved this in so many ways. I loved "the skies untethered"...and I loved the masculine feel of this poem...and suspect that much of that inner desire to protect and provide is missing from our modern culture, especially among men. I could be way off on this, but that is my initial response. Thank you Jimenance.
dude!

"Fortune smiled,

and hope recovered in a box,

Fury gone;

Life’s protector missing."

Loving it.......
follow the peece feed!
green buttered peas!
peece!
peace!
peece!
*bow*
and peace,
even if it's out if style
jim,
the good things about Mjollnir are: it never misses its mark, it never goes so far as not to
come back, and...it can be made so small as to fit in yr pocket...

full of genius...i usually approach a dense magnificent poem like this by pulling out the lines that resonate immediately in my soul, like:

"prophet of she now comes to see what he needs shown/to grow what now needs sown." but wait!....

then we have "prophet of he...speak to the wind...breathe life into shells of flesh/
again to rise 7 remember..."

i collect out the gems & then fill in the spaces...and then yr vision is mine &
i guess ive swallowed you!

great raw rant...the old mythology lives
underground...titanic energies rolling beneath the surface...to rise on the final day of imagination...

when we simply cease to behold the endless futile spinning of
these egos...
jim
The pentameter...oh...OH! Just dead on. Brilliant. xox
Very, Very cool. It reminded me of a dialogue for a comic strip. Not just any comic strip but something like Sandman. I enjoyed this.
thanks
Chocolate with Almonds – Thank you for stopping in :) I will look up some of the Icelandic sagas – anyone in particular or is it a compilation book of sorts? Thank you for the kind words!

Kathy Knechtges – thank you!

Newton! Thank you Logos, your words are appreciated.

Marytkelly – That is a spot on interpretation of the protector I was going for, so many children out there without fathers/protectors both here and abroad. Too many leave the hammer on the floor.

Trig! Thanks man :)

Aphrabehn – Thank you so much.

Arthur! – Yes, your comments sparkle much, Thank you.

Will someone Feed The Cat – thank you for stopping by and your kind words.

Mythos! – Deep thoughts always, James – I appreciate your kind words and interpretations as they always make the poem deeper to me.

Robin! Thank you for dropping by *hugz*

As always, you all’s comments push me and I have found in OS the desire to keep pushing at this boulder and see if this time I can make it over the top…

Peece!
dj
micalpeace - Thank for droppin by, man. High praises, Sandman is not just any piece, agreed! You are to kind - thanks!

peece!
dj
DJ, I am leaving town for a few days but upon my return I want to give some time to this...! -Angie
ever time i come back here to read one of your poems they just keep getting better. kudos!
Poetry will never go out of style for me. Lovely, dark, and mysterious is this one.
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Angie! You will be missed – be safe.

Barbara! Thank you so much for dropping by and the astute observation :D Kidding, but I really like it when I get that reaction.

Gracielou! Thank you – I went a little darker on this, I think it was more of a poetry rant of sorts. I appreciate you stopping by.

Peece!
DJ
Neil Peart circa 1975 would be proud of this.
Rated
Kind of Blue - Huge praise, I thank you :)
peece!
dj
WalkAwayHappy - thank you! I appreciate it :)
peece,
dj
I said I'd be back - I definitely enjoyed it more awake (though I'll be honest and say I probably missed a couple references).
More please.
I'm definitely getting back into writing poetry now...
Whereas your last piece called for whispering, this one screams punk, or maybe even heavy metal—I could see the Dead Kennedys, Suicidal Tendencies, or Black Sabbath performing this one. Rock on, DJ!

—Melissa
Das! welcome brother! tonight is a bit loud ;) but I love the echos it makes on the walls of my empty room... full of people?

Peece!

Meta!!! so much interaction yet to behold!?! Punk and METAL...and SOUL SOUL always ;) - but yes, metal is a love of mine :D.


Thank you so much for vibing with me.

peece!

DJ
I don't even feel qualified enough to comment on how well written this is. That this comes naturally to you is astounding. (Note to self: Must read more poetry and become less intimidated by it). Rated.
cartouche - High praise, I thank you sincerely. :)
I hate it. But it's really good.
I like your dual feeling to thus dual poem - thanks again, Aim :)

peece,
dj