just look me in the eyes. try not to notice the nervous laughter. just look into my eyes. my sweaty hands just shake...too loose a grip to hold. nevermind the noises behind this...nevermind the bang...nevermind the blast...no one here will survive this explosion. when it goes we all go. line after line after another line, just word in their order, just how i construct my thoughts...just look in my eyes and nevermind the rest. just watch my hands shake and ignore the tremors here.
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I read this three times in a row, backwards and forwards. I wanted to be sure I would at least attempt to absorb the full meaning behind the words. Despite this, I still find far too many subtexts and layers to pick just a singular plotline. It could be a myriad of things. Among my theories: A man with Parkinson's disease attempting to relay his memoir (my sweaty hands just shake...just watch my hands shake), athough after closer examination I felt that was a limited way of looking at this piece. It almost feels like someone with a mental disturbance of some type (specifically Borderline Personality/Depression) attempting to find love. I get that maybe the narrator of the piece is speaking to someone he/she has strong feelings for...not neccassarily romantic feelings, but a connection for sure.
I don't know if I'm even slightly on the point, and I'm sure you really didn't need an analysis of your piece via comment- but I just want you to know that I find your work extremely intriguing. You have a voice and style all your own.
E. Stark
Riveting
Intelligent and mind altering
I couldn't put it down
The sex is shocking.
I'm thinking twenty point type and a nice bright red color. You do this so well, it amazes me that you have yet to hook a publisher.
Rated.
you should write about your background and early life