FADE IN:
EXT. RURAL AMERICA - DAY
Sweeping views of farm and ranch land. It’s a dreary
winter day. COWS chase green grass near HAY BALES
stacked as high as the tallest building you'll find around here. TRACTORS maneuver in the mud; their tires leaving even more damage. Iced over ponds and creeks dot the pastures. Brittle trees line the roads washed out from the rains.
Sweeping views of farm and ranch land. It’s a dreary
winter day. COWS chase green grass near HAY BALES
stacked as high as the tallest building you'll find around here. TRACTORS maneuver in the mud; their tires leaving even more damage. Iced over ponds and creeks dot the pastures. Brittle trees line the roads washed out from the rains.
NARRATOR
Mark Twain once said, Buy land, they’re
not making it anymore.
not making it anymore.
(beat)
This is more true today than it was then.
INT. TIBIDEAUX FARMHOUSE, LIVING ROOM - NIGHT
This is more true today than it was then.
INT. TIBIDEAUX FARMHOUSE, LIVING ROOM - NIGHT
It’s sprawling and modern, yet cozy. A FIRE in the wood-
burning stove creates a soft glow. TWO DOGS are curled
up beneath the hearth. Ragged and dog-eared livestock
magazines litter the coffee table next to crystal candle
holders.
Pots and pans CLANG in the b.g.
JACK TIBIDEAUX, 30s, comes in the back door, stirring
the dogs from their nap. He’s handsome, tall and
strong - a horseshoer’s build. He takes off his flat
hat and silk wild rag around his neck, hanging them
on the vintage rack on the wall.
burning stove creates a soft glow. TWO DOGS are curled
up beneath the hearth. Ragged and dog-eared livestock
magazines litter the coffee table next to crystal candle
holders.
Pots and pans CLANG in the b.g.
JACK TIBIDEAUX, 30s, comes in the back door, stirring
the dogs from their nap. He’s handsome, tall and
strong - a horseshoer’s build. He takes off his flat
hat and silk wild rag around his neck, hanging them
on the vintage rack on the wall.
JACK
(calling out)
Hey!
NANCY (O.S.)
Hey!
He takes a look around.
JACK
I see the power came back on.
NANCY (O.S.)
Yeah, late this afternoon.
Jack looks down at his MUDDY BOOTS and takes a step back
outside.
NANCY TIBIDEAUX, 30s, emerges from the kitchen to greet
him. She’s naturally cute. Her long, red hair tied in a
ponytail with not a stitch of make-up on.
NANCY(CONT’D)
The water finally came on around eleven.
Jack comes back inside, bootless. The fringe on his worn and patched chaps SLAPS against the leather. He slips out of them and peels off his thick pea coat, revealing mud-caked clothes.
Hey!
NANCY (O.S.)
Hey!
He takes a look around.
JACK
I see the power came back on.
NANCY (O.S.)
Yeah, late this afternoon.
Jack looks down at his MUDDY BOOTS and takes a step back
outside.
NANCY TIBIDEAUX, 30s, emerges from the kitchen to greet
him. She’s naturally cute. Her long, red hair tied in a
ponytail with not a stitch of make-up on.
NANCY(CONT’D)
The water finally came on around eleven.
Jack comes back inside, bootless. The fringe on his worn and patched chaps SLAPS against the leather. He slips out of them and peels off his thick pea coat, revealing mud-caked clothes.
NANCY (CONT’D)
Whoa. You’re a mess.
JACK
Ya think?
He scans his water soaked jeans and stretches out his
arms.
JACK (CONT’D)
Come here.
NANCY
No way!
He pulls her close as she struggles for freedom.
JACK
You know you love it.
NANCY
You’re dripping on the rug.
A shiver takes him over.
JACK
Man, I’m chilled to the bone.
NANCY
Go sit by the fire.
(proud)
I made it myself.
Jack looks over to the now dying fire.
JACK
I can see that.
She glances at it too.
NANCY
Whatever.
Nancy heads to the kitchen with Jack following.
INT. TIBIDEAUX FARMHOUSE, KITCHEN - SIMULTANEOUS
Nancy busies herself with dinner prep and Jack heads to the fridge for a beer.
NANCY
How was it today?
JACK
Icy and wet.
NANCY
Sorry babe.
He smiles sweetly at her.
JACK
I know, but what are you gonna do?
I know, but what are you gonna do?
(beat)
Anything happen with you today?
NANCY
Not really. Oh, the bank called this
NANCY
Not really. Oh, the bank called this
morning and they want to do the cattle
inspection.
Jack takes a big swig of his beer.
JACK
Now? Didn’t we do it in the spring last
year?
NANCY
Yeah, that’s what I was thinking.
(beat)
But, get this, she called around nine and
I didn’t catch the phone. The message
said they wanted to do it this afternoon.
Jack nearly spits out his beer.
JACK
Seriously?
NANCY
Yeah. I thought it was weird too.
First, like you’d be here at nine in the
morning. During calving season. During
feeding season. And second, that you’d
just have the afternoon wide open.
JACK
I wish.
(beat)
Is that all she said?
NANCY
Yeah.
JACK
That is kinda weird. I’ll give her
a call tomorrow and we’ll set it up, I
guess.
Jack steals a carrot from the cutting board and kisses
Nancy on the cheek.
JACK (CONT’D)
I’m gonna take a shower and warm up.
NANCY
You should take a bath.
He grabs another beer out of the fridge and heads out of
the room.
JACK
Oooh, can I have lavender in it too?
Nancy just laughs to herself.
EXT. TIBIDEAUX RANCH - MORNING
Horses and calves munch on hay in the front pasture as a
small truck makes its way up the paved driveway, stopping
at the garage of the brick house.
JACK
Now? Didn’t we do it in the spring last
year?
NANCY
Yeah, that’s what I was thinking.
(beat)
But, get this, she called around nine and
I didn’t catch the phone. The message
said they wanted to do it this afternoon.
Jack nearly spits out his beer.
JACK
Seriously?
NANCY
Yeah. I thought it was weird too.
First, like you’d be here at nine in the
morning. During calving season. During
feeding season. And second, that you’d
just have the afternoon wide open.
JACK
I wish.
(beat)
Is that all she said?
NANCY
Yeah.
JACK
That is kinda weird. I’ll give her
a call tomorrow and we’ll set it up, I
guess.
Jack steals a carrot from the cutting board and kisses
Nancy on the cheek.
JACK (CONT’D)
I’m gonna take a shower and warm up.
NANCY
You should take a bath.
He grabs another beer out of the fridge and heads out of
the room.
JACK
Oooh, can I have lavender in it too?
Nancy just laughs to herself.
EXT. TIBIDEAUX RANCH - MORNING
Horses and calves munch on hay in the front pasture as a
small truck makes its way up the paved driveway, stopping
at the garage of the brick house.
MADISON KELLER, 40s, steps out of the truck with
clipboard in hand. She glares at her surroundings as she
makes her way around the house to the front door.
INT. TIBIDEAUX FARMHOUSE, BEDROOM - SIMULTANEOUS
Nancy is snuggled in bed with the dogs.
She barely stirs as the doorbell CHIMES. The dogs,
however wake and are off and running.
EXT. TIBIDEAUX FARMHOUSE, FRONT DOOR - SIMULTANEOUS
Dogs BARK on the other side of the door as Madison presses her face against the glass next to it, peering inside.
clipboard in hand. She glares at her surroundings as she
makes her way around the house to the front door.
INT. TIBIDEAUX FARMHOUSE, BEDROOM - SIMULTANEOUS
Nancy is snuggled in bed with the dogs.
She barely stirs as the doorbell CHIMES. The dogs,
however wake and are off and running.
EXT. TIBIDEAUX FARMHOUSE, FRONT DOOR - SIMULTANEOUS
Dogs BARK on the other side of the door as Madison presses her face against the glass next to it, peering inside.
She KNOCKS on the door with furor.
INT. TIBIDEAUX FARMHOUSE, BEDROOM - SIMULTANEOUS
The continued KNOCKING startles Nancy and she rushes out
of bed and to the front door.
NANCY
(to herself)
Oh god, oh god, oh god.
INT. TIBIDEAUX FARMHOUSE, FRONT DOOR - SIMULTANEOUS
Nancy swings the door open only to find Madison on the
other side.
NANCY
Oh man, you scared me. I thought
something happened to Jack.
MADISON
Oh, no, it’s only me.
Nancy is both pissed and confused.
NANCY
With that knocking, I thought for sure
there was an emergency.
(beat)
What can I do for you?
MADISON
Well, I called yesterday.
NANCY
Yeah.
MADISON
I didn’t hear anything.
NANCY
Jack didn’t get home until late.
He planned to call today.
Nancy opens the door a bit more and Madison immediately
steps inside, eyeing the room.
NANCY (CONT’D)
(taken aback)
Is something wrong?
MADISON
No. We just need to do the inspection.
(beat)
I thought y’all were gone or something
and thought I better come by.
NANCY
Like we were out of town?
MADISON
Yeah.
NANCY
You just called yesterday morning. Jack
hasn’t even had a chance to call you back.
MADISON
Well, I just thought I better check
everything out.
NANCY
Okay. Well, Jack’s down working for
one of the neighbors, he needs to check
with him and find out when he can do it.
MADISON
Which neighbor?
NANCY
The Whites.
Madison shuffles her feet, but doesn’t budge.
MADISON
When do you think he’ll be able to? Since
the freeze is over, we thought it would be
a good time.
NANCY
I wouldn’t know. I do know it’s a muddy
mess here, so I can only imagine what
Palmer looks like.
MADISON
So you think early next week?
Nancy is aggravated, but keeps it under wraps.
NANCY
Again, I would have no idea. He is
speaking with them today and planned on
calling you later.
MADISON
Okay, well, we’ll plan on early next week
then.
With that, Nancy opens the door to let her out.
NANCY
Sounds fine. I’ll make sure he gives you
a call.
INT. TWEETY JOHNSON’S HOUSE - NIGHT
Small house, cluttered. TWEETY JOHNSON, 60s, is a big
boy. He relaxes in his Lazy-Boy, reclined as far as the
chair can muster. Beer can in one hand, remote in the
other.
On T.V. we SEE:
A NEWSCASTER reporting on another winter ice storm
approaching.
BITSY JOHNSON comes in and pulls out a TV tray table
from the corner, setting it up next to Tweety’s resting
spot.
He clicks the remote, changing the channel; on T.V. we SEE:
A WEATHERMAN, standing in front of an interactive map,
describing the latest developments. Then, flashes of
washed out roads, fallen trees, icy roads, snow.
TWEETY
Man, this sucker isn’t lettin’ up.
Bitsy heads out of the room.
BITSY (O.S.)
Any good news?
TWEETY
Doesn’t look like it.
She returns with a massive plate of food and sets it on
the tray table. Tweety struggles with the chair, but
finally gets it in the upright position, sliding his
dinner in front of him.
BITSY
What about the cows?
TWEETY
They’ll be fine with the weather, they’ve
got the trees, but I sure would like to
spread them out a little more.
BITSY
Well, we know that ain’t gonna happen.
TWEETY
We’ll see.
INT. TIBIDEAUX FARMHOUSE, BEDROOM - SIMULTANEOUS
The continued KNOCKING startles Nancy and she rushes out
of bed and to the front door.
NANCY
(to herself)
Oh god, oh god, oh god.
INT. TIBIDEAUX FARMHOUSE, FRONT DOOR - SIMULTANEOUS
Nancy swings the door open only to find Madison on the
other side.
NANCY
Oh man, you scared me. I thought
something happened to Jack.
MADISON
Oh, no, it’s only me.
Nancy is both pissed and confused.
NANCY
With that knocking, I thought for sure
there was an emergency.
(beat)
What can I do for you?
MADISON
Well, I called yesterday.
NANCY
Yeah.
MADISON
I didn’t hear anything.
NANCY
Jack didn’t get home until late.
He planned to call today.
Nancy opens the door a bit more and Madison immediately
steps inside, eyeing the room.
NANCY (CONT’D)
(taken aback)
Is something wrong?
MADISON
No. We just need to do the inspection.
(beat)
I thought y’all were gone or something
and thought I better come by.
NANCY
Like we were out of town?
MADISON
Yeah.
NANCY
You just called yesterday morning. Jack
hasn’t even had a chance to call you back.
MADISON
Well, I just thought I better check
everything out.
NANCY
Okay. Well, Jack’s down working for
one of the neighbors, he needs to check
with him and find out when he can do it.
MADISON
Which neighbor?
NANCY
The Whites.
Madison shuffles her feet, but doesn’t budge.
MADISON
When do you think he’ll be able to? Since
the freeze is over, we thought it would be
a good time.
NANCY
I wouldn’t know. I do know it’s a muddy
mess here, so I can only imagine what
Palmer looks like.
MADISON
So you think early next week?
Nancy is aggravated, but keeps it under wraps.
NANCY
Again, I would have no idea. He is
speaking with them today and planned on
calling you later.
MADISON
Okay, well, we’ll plan on early next week
then.
With that, Nancy opens the door to let her out.
NANCY
Sounds fine. I’ll make sure he gives you
a call.
INT. TWEETY JOHNSON’S HOUSE - NIGHT
Small house, cluttered. TWEETY JOHNSON, 60s, is a big
boy. He relaxes in his Lazy-Boy, reclined as far as the
chair can muster. Beer can in one hand, remote in the
other.
On T.V. we SEE:
A NEWSCASTER reporting on another winter ice storm
approaching.
BITSY JOHNSON comes in and pulls out a TV tray table
from the corner, setting it up next to Tweety’s resting
spot.
He clicks the remote, changing the channel; on T.V. we SEE:
A WEATHERMAN, standing in front of an interactive map,
describing the latest developments. Then, flashes of
washed out roads, fallen trees, icy roads, snow.
TWEETY
Man, this sucker isn’t lettin’ up.
Bitsy heads out of the room.
BITSY (O.S.)
Any good news?
TWEETY
Doesn’t look like it.
She returns with a massive plate of food and sets it on
the tray table. Tweety struggles with the chair, but
finally gets it in the upright position, sliding his
dinner in front of him.
BITSY
What about the cows?
TWEETY
They’ll be fine with the weather, they’ve
got the trees, but I sure would like to
spread them out a little more.
BITSY
Well, we know that ain’t gonna happen.
TWEETY
We’ll see.
BITSY
Did you hear about another lease?
TWEETY
No. Nothin' available right now.
As he clicks the remote through the channels, a sly grin spreads across his face.
EXT. TIBIDEAUX PALMER LEASE, FRONT 160 ACRES - DAY
A fine mist hangs in the air adding to the already
miserable cold temperatures.
Jack stands beside an open iron gate as Madison’s truck pulls through the entrance. As he shuts it behind them, Madison and WAYNE CATCHER, 60s, file out.
Jack heads to a horse trailer where his horse is tied to the side - saddled and ready to go.
WAYNE
Where are they at?
JACK
In one of the back pastures.
Wayne looks back at the truck.
WAYNE
Oh, should we get back in?
JACK
Not if you don’t want to get stuck.
Jack unties his horse, mounting him with ease. They trot through the pasture of wet, yellow grass; heading for some trees in the distance. The other two tentatively follow on foot.
Oh, should we get back in?
JACK
Not if you don’t want to get stuck.
Jack unties his horse, mounting him with ease. They trot through the pasture of wet, yellow grass; heading for some trees in the distance. The other two tentatively follow on foot.
WAYNE
You feed them back there?
JACK
Yeah, like I told her, I’m not on
You feed them back there?
JACK
Yeah, like I told her, I’m not on
a regular feeding schedule here.
There’s still green grass and old
feed back there. So, I don’t have
to put out hay every day yet.
WAYNE
Oh.
MADISON
Why didn’t you move them up here?
JACK
When would I have had time? This had
Oh.
MADISON
Why didn’t you move them up here?
JACK
When would I have had time? This had
to be done right now for some reason
and I'm trying to accomodate that. But,
I just can't move them just to move them
right back.
Wayne nods and Madison takes in her surroundings.
MADISON
How many acres is this lease?
JACK
480.
MADISON
And how many is this pasture?
JACK
It’s broken up, but basically 160.
Jack trots slightly ahead of them with a small grin on his face. Madison looks like a wet rag doll already.
MADISON
Oh.
EXT. TIBIDEAUX PALMER LEASE, BACK 160 ACRES - LATER
Fifty cows and lots of newborn calves mill about. Some
munch on grass, some hide in the thick trees; taking
cover from the weather.
Jack unhinges a wire gate and Wayne and Madison make
their way through it. He closes it and heads past
them.
They come upon a creek running across their path. Jack and his horse head right in as Wayne and Madison stop on the bank.
The trusted horse wades through the water, in some places dipping up to his knees. When he gets to the other side, Jack turns to see they haven’t crossed.
JACK
You comin’?
Madison is drenched and shaking. She looks to Wayne and motions her head “no”.
WAYNE
Can you just push them out so we can see
them?
JACK
I thought you said you wanted to count
them?
MADISON
We do. You’ll just need to push them all
out here.
JACK
I’ll see what I can do.
Jack turns his horse toward the tree line on his right and follows it. Cows move out from the trees into the open as they move forward. Wayne and Madison become specks in the b.g.
MADISON
How many acres is this lease?
JACK
480.
MADISON
And how many is this pasture?
JACK
It’s broken up, but basically 160.
Jack trots slightly ahead of them with a small grin on his face. Madison looks like a wet rag doll already.
MADISON
Oh.
EXT. TIBIDEAUX PALMER LEASE, BACK 160 ACRES - LATER
Fifty cows and lots of newborn calves mill about. Some
munch on grass, some hide in the thick trees; taking
cover from the weather.
Jack unhinges a wire gate and Wayne and Madison make
their way through it. He closes it and heads past
them.
They come upon a creek running across their path. Jack and his horse head right in as Wayne and Madison stop on the bank.
The trusted horse wades through the water, in some places dipping up to his knees. When he gets to the other side, Jack turns to see they haven’t crossed.
JACK
You comin’?
Madison is drenched and shaking. She looks to Wayne and motions her head “no”.
WAYNE
Can you just push them out so we can see
them?
JACK
I thought you said you wanted to count
them?
MADISON
We do. You’ll just need to push them all
out here.
JACK
I’ll see what I can do.
Jack turns his horse toward the tree line on his right and follows it. Cows move out from the trees into the open as they move forward. Wayne and Madison become specks in the b.g.
When he's out of ear shot:
JACK (CONT'D)
You've got to be fucking kidding
me! Just push them out?
EXT. TIBIDEAUX PALMER LEASE, BACK 160 ACRES - LATER
Thick trees surround a pond. Cows are barely visible in
the pine branches. Jack walks alongside his horse and cusses to himself as a branch snaps back and hits him across the face, knocking his hat off and leaving a scratch on his face.
Thick trees surround a pond. Cows are barely visible in
the pine branches. Jack walks alongside his horse and cusses to himself as a branch snaps back and hits him across the face, knocking his hat off and leaving a scratch on his face.
He picks up his hat and slaps his leg with it. He puts it back on and spreads his arms wide.
JACK
Hup! Hup!
Cows rustle branches, coming into view.
JACK (CONT’D)
Hup! Hup!
He pushes them into a clearing as another branch slaps
him across the chest.
EXT. TIBIDEAUX PALMER LEASE, BACK 160 ACRES - LATER
View from binoculars:
One hundred or so cows graze in the open pasture.
Newborn calves nurse from their mothers.
Wayne pulls the binoculars away from his eyes.
WAYNE
148.
Madison makes a hash mark on her clipboard.
MADISON
Got it.
WAYNE
67.
She checks another one off.
MADISON
Got it.
Jack emerges on the outskirts of the herd and trots back across the creek to join them.
WAYNE
I have to tell you, this isn’t at all
what I expected to find.
Jack is concerned.
JACK
Oh?
WAYNE
Yeah, you’ve got a couple in there that
could use a little more protein, but all-
in-all that’s a pretty good bunch.
JACK
Hup! Hup!
Cows rustle branches, coming into view.
JACK (CONT’D)
Hup! Hup!
He pushes them into a clearing as another branch slaps
him across the chest.
EXT. TIBIDEAUX PALMER LEASE, BACK 160 ACRES - LATER
View from binoculars:
One hundred or so cows graze in the open pasture.
Newborn calves nurse from their mothers.
Wayne pulls the binoculars away from his eyes.
WAYNE
148.
Madison makes a hash mark on her clipboard.
MADISON
Got it.
WAYNE
67.
She checks another one off.
MADISON
Got it.
Jack emerges on the outskirts of the herd and trots back across the creek to join them.
WAYNE
I have to tell you, this isn’t at all
what I expected to find.
Jack is concerned.
JACK
Oh?
WAYNE
Yeah, you’ve got a couple in there that
could use a little more protein, but all-
in-all that’s a pretty good bunch.
JACK
What were you expecting?
WAYNE
Pretty sick animals.
JACK
(completely shocked)
Why would you think that?
WAYNE
A guy came into the office and said you
weren’t feeding anything out here.
Madison shuffles her feet.
JACK
What?
(beat)
Who?
WAYNE
I don’t know. Some guy.
JACK
How would anyone know what I’m doing?
MADISON
Someone probably wants the lease.
Wayne nods.
JACK
Seriously?
(beat)
Wow. I really don’t know what to say.
Why didn’t you say anything to me?
MADISON
Not the way it works.
Jack contains his anger.
MADISON (CONT’D)
We still have to count them all.
JACK
I got out what I could.
Wayne scratches Jack's horse behind the ears.
What were you expecting?
WAYNE
Pretty sick animals.
JACK
(completely shocked)
Why would you think that?
WAYNE
A guy came into the office and said you
weren’t feeding anything out here.
Madison shuffles her feet.
JACK
What?
(beat)
Who?
WAYNE
I don’t know. Some guy.
JACK
How would anyone know what I’m doing?
MADISON
Someone probably wants the lease.
Wayne nods.
JACK
Seriously?
(beat)
Wow. I really don’t know what to say.
Why didn’t you say anything to me?
MADISON
Not the way it works.
Jack contains his anger.
MADISON (CONT’D)
We still have to count them all.
JACK
I got out what I could.
Wayne scratches Jack's horse behind the ears.
WAYNE
Yeah, that’s fine. We’ll come back out
when this weather clears up a bit or when
you start them on regular feed. I can
see this place does still have some
decent grass. Cuts down on the hay cost,
huh?
JACK
Yeah, for now.
(beat)
I can’t believe someone would do something
like this.
WAYNE
People need land.
Wayne looks over to a shaking Madison.
WAYNE (CONT’D)
Why don’t we get out of here.
Jack blots at some blood coming from the cut on his face.
JACK
Sounds good to me.
And with that, they head back through the gate and
pasture, feet and hooves splashing with every step.
EXT. TIBIDEAUX PALMER LEASE - FRONT 160 ACRES - LATER
As Wayne and Madison make their way back to the truck, neighbor Tweety Johnson comes down the main road, kicking up mud behind him. He stops in front of the entrance.
decent grass. Cuts down on the hay cost,
huh?
JACK
Yeah, for now.
(beat)
I can’t believe someone would do something
like this.
WAYNE
People need land.
Wayne looks over to a shaking Madison.
WAYNE (CONT’D)
Why don’t we get out of here.
Jack blots at some blood coming from the cut on his face.
JACK
Sounds good to me.
And with that, they head back through the gate and
pasture, feet and hooves splashing with every step.
EXT. TIBIDEAUX PALMER LEASE - FRONT 160 ACRES - LATER
As Wayne and Madison make their way back to the truck, neighbor Tweety Johnson comes down the main road, kicking up mud behind him. He stops in front of the entrance.
Just then, Jack comes out from behind the horse trailer and waves to Tweety. Tweety responds in kind and then hits the gas pedal sending Madison scrambling to get out of range of the mud his truck is throwing.
Wayne and Madison give each other a knowing look and as Jack approaches:
WAYNE
You know, Jack, I think every-
thing's gonna be just fine.
He pats Jack on the back and with that, they look around the vast landscape of wet grass and pine trees as far as the eye can see.
FADE OUT.


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Comments
I'm thinking this is real life Jules, not just out of your head. Beautifully done.
Shame it seems someone always has to be taking shots at one another, even out in the country.
JACK
(whisper) Get a rope.
I see Amy Adams as Nancy.
This rocked Julie!
Steve - Yeah, one of the first things I learned about screenwriting is they don't want all the flowery adjectives - sometimes I think I took it a little too far. I'm glad you get it. And you sir, are very, very kewl.
D - That could work. Hey - it's like an interactive script!
Blu - It's a very fancy rug though.
Libs - Yeah, but it took them a while to realize it. I think they like hoops.
Kitty Cat - That means a lot coming from you. For serious.
Mac - Thanks - they do don't they? I was particularly fond of that too.
Thanks, George. Hey, any time you want to put that real-life cowboy stuff into action, let me know. We'll give you a gun and everything.
mg - I'm glad it came across as intended. Sometimes we get a little too close - so, that's great feedback. I appreciate it.
Donna - Yes, I believe it is!
L - I know - it's still hard for me to even fathom. Really unbelievable.
Surly - There are chinks, but I'll revise so when he slips them off there's no jeans underneath.
Janie - Thanks! That actually probably would be fun to write. Then act out. Okay, maybe only write.
Silky - It's just one more thing I suppose. I'll take Amy Adams - as long as she doesn't break out in song. "Paint Your Wagon"
Kelly - Thanks for feeling the frustration. Yeah, there's land, but it costs too much moolah still. That's the one thing that hasn't gone down in this economy - the price of land. So, anytime there land that is strictly leased, well, the hounds circle. It's crazy that someone would go to this length to get it though. Jacking with someone else's bank - they crossed the biggest line I can imagine. I do believe we'll see a guard with a permanent residence there.
Emma - Yikes! That can't be good.
Sparky - I wish I could just get Steve to speak for me at all times. Thanks for dropping by! Y'all so sweet.
You see, I am making up all my "Texas exits" before I ever get dragged there again.
Evil lurks in towns small and cities large,
and often behind the grip of warm handshakes
and welcoming smiles.
En Garde.
BTW, wonderful story and am full of casting ideas.
Blondie - So true. You'd think I'd be more cynical by now, but I swear I think everyone is just like me. And we all know I'm a little too honest sometimes. Sword up! Oooh - cast?
You balanced this so well, the sense of impending serious trouble (but maybe that's just because I saw a teaser last week), the low comedy let's-watch-the-big-bad-bank-woman-flail-in-the-mud, Jack's self-control when facing absurd requests
Am I gushing? It's because I got sucked in, and because I second that remark of Deven's.
Em - Well, the no make-up thing is just because I'm lazy. Who's going to see me, right? (Don't tell my granny.)
You did have an inside scoop - but I'm glad you got out of it what I tried to convey.
Since there are no laws here, I'm thinking we go with Deven's plan too. Hey! Are we forming a posse? Sweet! Crap. I guess I'll have to put on make-up.
i'm a little in love with jack, not only because his name is a huge fav. and there has never been a more exotic name for a scarf than "wild rag." whoa.
Mom - I totally am. It's about time you noticed. Let me know if that restraining order from Peyton comes through - I'll totally bale you out.
HB - Thanks! Hell, that sucker's been in development for years now it seems. Seems like it's making progress now though.
Beautifully written.
Beautifully written.
Julie, this sounds so familiar. I lived part of my childhood on a fair sized cattle ranch with a few hired hands. My mom was the ranch cook, my stepfather was the horse trainer. It seemed to me growing up that folks were always up to something. I am reminded of the ranch manager who was always sneaking down to the cook house getting some of my mom's cooking, in addition to his wife's. He had a lot in common with Tweety in size, and character.
That familiar pain in the ass has the ring of truth Julie! People didn't get crafty just recently. Wonderful writing.
Great piece, well done, rated.
Tweety=dumb bastard. did he seriously think he could lie and get his way? That no one would check? Morons abound everywhere.
Skel - Well, I may have embellished the cute wifey part a bit...
Thoth - Thanks!
ttfn - I keep asking that same thing. I guess someone stupid enough to go to those lengths doesn't think that far past himself. Morons indeed.
Bubba - Thanks, I appreciate it. Chin Chin!