I wrote a poem last year about Christmas and Climate Change. The meter was slightly off here and there, so I tried to improve it in a few places for this re-post. If anyone has any further concerns about the meter, please let me know.
A Christmas Peril
by Kent M. Pitman
’Twas the first iceless Christmas, and all through the world,
it was warm enough now, the last snowflake had swirled.
The stockings were hung in the humid night air
in mem’ry of times when St. Nick would come there.
The children were sweating atop a clean sheet,
wishing somehow they’d manage to beat the night heat.
My stories of polar caps had some appeal,
But I couldn’t explain—it just sounded surreal:
I’d point to the freezer then wave my arms wide,
“It was just like in there—but they had it outside.”
The kids couldn’t fathom the words they were told
of an ocean of water, turned to ice by the cold.
So my tales of such things must have ended up boring.
All I know, in the end, is it had them soon snoring.
Then I kissed their small foreheads, and looked to the sky,
and thought about how we had got here, and why.
As I watched through the fog and the mist and the haze,
A twinkle of something soon captured my gaze.
I patiently watched as it moved to our shore.
Each moment that passed, I could see a bit more.
An orca, eight dolphins, with someone in tow.
Even at SeaWorld I’d seen no such show.
The figure approached and I poured up some nog,
It was plainly St. Nick coming out of the fog.
But to my horror, slung over his back,
weren’t presents but coal brimming out of the sack.
Nor was it the clean kind, or some such confusion.
He was angry, you see, there could be no illusion.
“You’re killing the planet,” he said with a frown,
It’s time you got busy and turned that around.
He fussed and he fretted. He was loaded for bear—
Not that any were left, I thought with a scare.
And just about then, I screamed—and it woke us!
It had all been a dream, but in frightening focus.
I told of my dream to my kids, still sheet white,
“It was awful,” I said, “but may soon be our plight.”
We wrote up a letter to Santa that night,
It was different than normal, and much more contrite.
“Dear Santa,” it started, and went on from there.
We wanted him knowing we really do care.
“We’ve given no thought to the plight of the elves
as the ice has been melting and falling from shelves.
We’ve taken your toys for a number of years,
it’s time we helped you, lest more ice turn to tears.”
“Don’t worry about us, we’re feeling a shift,
The Earth, by itself, is enough of a gift.
Whatever it takes, after this Christmas Carol,
it’s time we wake up to our planet in peril.”
So we propped up the letter, with cookies and tea,
And I tucked in the kids, feeling finally free.
There was still much to do, in the days up ahead
But for now I was calm again, ready for bed.
As I drifted, I heard a voice, ever so slight,
“Merry Christmas to all, and to all a cool night!”
Copyright © 2008, 2009 Kent M. Pitman.
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This is version 1.2.
Version 1.1 corrected some slight wording glitches.
This newer version changes some lines that had poor meter.
If you got value from this post, please "rate" it.
†As an update to this post, I added “Aqua” to the title here, signifying the color of ice turned to water, as part of a call for colors in titles suggested by Will Someone Feed The Cat. I was very pleased with how that project came out.


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Comments
This should be submitted somewhere like Common Dreams, or perhaps even the NY Times op-ed page. It's wonderful.
I echo Steph's statement, my friend - first rate!
So, I rated it first.
FLW, I'll check that out. It may not help that it's already published here, though... although I admit that putting something up here, without editor help to become visible, is only the barest imitation of “publishing.”
Bill, thanks for the meter reading. Glad you liked it.
Pilgrim, thanks for stopping in!
Smithery, see my essay Climate Change Coming “Faster Than Expected” ... I worry.
Rated.
'Tis sad but true what you have discovered about the Times. Any work including what is published here on Open Salon is not for them.
Hoping for a cooler future.
for us all.
“It was just like in there—but they had it outside."
I have zero concerns about meter (as I don't write poetry), and thought this was a great spin on the original poem!
Thanks for the re-post, you clever man!
:-)
Sage, I don't know, but for this piece I think getting the message out is quite important. That's why I have a special copyright permitting non-commercial copying for this one.
Spotted, as long as it didn't snag as you read it, that's all I care about. I'm glad you liked the freezer metaphor. I read the piece cold (pardon pun) a few days ago and liked that as well. :)
This is a fine reworking of a pithy, thoughtful, yet winsome poem. I thought of “The Lorax” and I think Dr. Seuss would be proud.
Rated and appreciated.
As you say, there is much to do, and we can all do something, it´s not such big deal, and it can make a whole difference for the next generations.
Merry Christmas!
Kisses,
Marcela
Most excellent in every way! You know it snowed in DC so global warming is a hoax.
Cindy, thanks for the kind words of support.
Nikki, being read aloud at Copenhagen would have been fun. Next time with more planning perhaps... neither the issue nor this poem is going away.
Marcela, me hace feliz que te gustó el poema. The problem only gets worse as we wait. The lack of small actions now means big actions tomorrow.
Gary, thanks! I hadn't thought about it that way, but yes—a new kind of “grim” fairytale for a new generation. Heh...
Lisa, that's very kind of you. I like to think Open Salon does have a national audience, but it depends on them taking that role seriously, I guess.
Verbal, thanks for stopping in to enjoy the poem. And I'm glad the CSS post was able to add some color to your post. That color project is really fun.
Lunchlady, I'm glad you caught it this time around. It's always good to see new faces in the crowd.
awesome poem. The one thing I might add, mostly as an aside, is the fact that no one mentions the fact that climate change and energy are two issues that will do FAR more to decrease health care costs, as far fewer people get sick from fossil fuel related ailments. In theory, if carbon is reduced, and we find a way to replace the reflective properties of the depleted ozone layer, cancer rates will drop dramatically, among other health related issues that have more to do with saving HUMANITY than saving "the planet". The planet will still be here when humanity dies out. Humanity, not so much
Freaky, it was your prime opportunity to get everything to be about “you, you, you” by just letting us all die out. Plastic or not, it's quite a statement of your humanity to say you're worried about us! Thanks for visiting.
Ozone depletion is not caused by greenhouse gases. You're confusing two seperate phenomenon. Also, what are fossil fuel related ailments?
By the way, I added “Aqua” to the title of this in order to join Will Someone Feed The Cat's call for colors.
Loved it, and of course, all the fancy editing. Merry, Merry.
Rated!!!!
polar bears might as well be dodos to our great-grandchildren, what else will they miss?