Kent Pitman

Kent Pitman
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Philosopher, Technologist, Writer
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I've been using the net in various roles—technical, social, and political—for the last 30 years. I'm disappointed that most forums don't pay for good writing and I'm ever in search of forums that do. (I've not seen any Tippem money, that's for sure.) And I worry some that our posting here for free could one day put paid writers in Closed Salon out of work. See my personal home page for more about me.

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DECEMBER 23, 2009 9:36AM

Aqua: A Christmas Peril† (updated poem)

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I wrote a poem last year about Christmas and Climate Change. The meter was slightly off here and there, so I tried to improve it in a few places for this re-post. If anyone has any further concerns about the meter, please let me know.

A Christmas Peril

by Kent M. Pitman

’Twas the first iceless Christmas, and all through the world,
  it was warm enough now, the last snowflake had swirled.
The stockings were hung in the humid night air
  in mem’ry of times when St. Nick would come there.

The children were sweating atop a clean sheet,
  wishing somehow they’d manage to beat the night heat.
My stories of polar caps had some appeal,
  But I couldn’t explain—it just sounded surreal:

I’d point to the freezer then wave my arms wide,
  “It was just like in there—but they had it outside.”
The kids couldn’t fathom the words they were told
  of an ocean of water, turned to ice by the cold.

So my tales of such things must have ended up boring.
  All I know, in the end, is it had them soon snoring.
Then I kissed their small foreheads, and looked to the sky,
  and thought about how we had got here, and why.

As I watched through the fog and the mist and the haze,
  A twinkle of something soon captured my gaze.
I patiently watched as it moved to our shore.
  Each moment that passed, I could see a bit more.

An orca, eight dolphins, with someone in tow.
  Even at SeaWorld I’d seen no such show.
The figure approached and I poured up some nog,
  It was plainly St. Nick coming out of the fog.

But to my horror, slung over his back,
  weren’t presents but coal brimming out of the sack.
Nor was it the clean kind, or some such confusion.
  He was angry, you see, there could be no illusion.

“You’re killing the planet,” he said with a frown,
  It’s time you got busy and turned that around.
He fussed and he fretted. He was loaded for bear—
  Not that any were left, I thought with a scare.

And just about then, I screamed—and it woke us!
  It had all been a dream, but in frightening focus.
I told of my dream to my kids, still sheet white,
  “It was awful,” I said, “but may soon be our plight.”

We wrote up a letter to Santa that night,
  It was different than normal, and much more contrite.
“Dear Santa,” it started, and went on from there.
  We wanted him knowing we really do care.

“We’ve given no thought to the plight of the elves
  as the ice has been melting and falling from shelves.
We’ve taken your toys for a number of years,
  it’s time we helped you, lest more ice turn to tears.”

“Don’t worry about us, we’re feeling a shift,
  The Earth, by itself, is enough of a gift.
Whatever it takes, after this Christmas Carol,
  it’s time we wake up to our planet in peril.”

So we propped up the letter, with cookies and tea,
  And I tucked in the kids, feeling finally free.
There was still much to do, in the days up ahead
  But for now I was calm again, ready for bed.

As I drifted, I heard a voice, ever so slight,
  “Merry Christmas to all, and to all a cool night!”


Copyright © 2008, 2009 Kent M. Pitman.
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This is version 1.2.
Version 1.1 corrected some slight wording glitches.
This newer version changes some lines that had poor meter.

If you got value from this post, please "rate" it.

†As an update to this post, I added “Aqua” to the title here, signifying the color of ice turned to water, as part of a call for colors in titles suggested by Will Someone Feed The Cat. I was very pleased with how that project came out.

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This is first rate, Kent! Somehow I missed it last year so I am so glad you reprinted it.
Kent,
This should be submitted somewhere like Common Dreams, or perhaps even the NY Times op-ed page. It's wonderful.
Thanks for a worthy rerun. The meter is running, and it's fine. :-D

I echo Steph's statement, my friend - first rate!

So, I rated it first.
Merry Christmas and a cool night to you, Kent. Let's hope your poem self's dream is not prophetic.
o'steph, thanks. Good to find a new audience.

FLW, I'll check that out. It may not help that it's already published here, though... although I admit that putting something up here, without editor help to become visible, is only the barest imitation of “publishing.”

Bill, thanks for the meter reading. Glad you liked it.

Pilgrim, thanks for stopping in!

Smithery, see my essay Climate Change Coming “Faster Than Expected” ... I worry.
Excellent revision. Thank you so much for letting me know you posted it again! I agree with FLW, you should submit this to the Times. The worst they'll say is no.
Rated.
I checked and the Times only wants op-ed articles not already published elsewhere. I'll keep it in mind as an option for other pieces though.
I do think the meter flows fine Kent and am happy to see this updated poem here again.
'Tis sad but true what you have discovered about the Times. Any work including what is published here on Open Salon is not for them.
Hoping for a cooler future.
for us all.
Does the Times pay real money for op ed pieces? If not, fuck em.
As one of Al Gore's minions, I love this poem. Have your heard aboutt Nathan Myrvold's hose of sulfur to the skies as a quick fix? How American, don't you think>
"I’d point to the freezer then wave my arms wide,
“It was just like in there—but they had it outside."

I have zero concerns about meter (as I don't write poetry), and thought this was a great spin on the original poem!
Thanks for the re-post, you clever man!
:-)
Bonnie, I saw the interview with him on Fareed's GPS show this week. Pouring stuff into the atmosphere scares me because it's hard to adjust, so it's not something I hope we use, but I think it's good to explore these ideas. I know people who are looking into radical uses of algae in extreme circumstances, too. These are not pretty solutions but under appropriate circumstances, they may well turn out to matter. If you have not seen my essay Climate Change Coming “Faster Than Expected” I recommend it.
Mission, thanks for stopping by to enjoy the new version.

Sage, I don't know, but for this piece I think getting the message out is quite important. That's why I have a special copyright permitting non-commercial copying for this one.

Spotted, as long as it didn't snag as you read it, that's all I care about. I'm glad you liked the freezer metaphor. I read the piece cold (pardon pun) a few days ago and liked that as well. :)
Kent,
This is a fine reworking of a pithy, thoughtful, yet winsome poem. I thought of “The Lorax” and I think Dr. Seuss would be proud.
Rated and appreciated.
Thanks, Dennis. I've studied the details of Seuss's poetry in some detail, so those words are especially appreciated.
Kindly send this to Senator James Inhofe, pusher and protector of the darkness that will soon befall us all.
Absolutely great. Should have been read aloud in COpenhagen
Perfect, appropriate, timely, oh so timely! I am impressed with the quality of your poem, Kent; thanks for sharing it again because I missed it last year.
As you say, there is much to do, and we can all do something, it´s not such big deal, and it can make a whole difference for the next generations.
Merry Christmas!
Kisses,
Marcela
Kent, this is for a fresh, new age....a desire to stop the madness...
Agree that you should immediately email this to the NYT OpEd Page. Also, send it to big Salon. Right now! (Meanwhile I'm copying it on my facebook page, Just great.
Just perfect! This deserves a national audience. I'm sorry I missed it last year but glad to see it this year. Thanks so much. Merry Christmas, Kent!
Happy to rate this, Kent. Also, I used your CSS post to format my colour post. So thanks for that!
I missed this last year so it's fresh for me.

Most excellent in every way! You know it snowed in DC so global warming is a hoax.
I wasn't here last year so thank you for posting it again! I really enjoyed this very timely piece.
Tom, Inhofe is not my Senator. But moreover, he's not going to be convinced by rhetoric. He's not even swayed by facts. If you or anyone is in his district and want to contact him about votes, he might listen to that.

Cindy, thanks for the kind words of support.

Nikki, being read aloud at Copenhagen would have been fun. Next time with more planning perhaps... neither the issue nor this poem is going away.

Marcela, me hace feliz que te gustó el poema. The problem only gets worse as we wait. The lack of small actions now means big actions tomorrow.

Gary, thanks! I hadn't thought about it that way, but yes—a new kind of “grim” fairytale for a new generation. Heh...
Lea, the NYT doesn't want submissions already published elsewhere, unfortunately. And Big Salon's submission guidelines says, “please note that Salon does not solicit fiction or poetry submissions and will not be able to respond to such submissions.” And anyway, if Big Salon is not reading along already here, that's a problem! I guess I'll just have to wait for an editor to happen along here and consider giving me some cover space if they think it relevant enough and decently enough written. I've spoken a lot about OS cover policy, and I think they don't always make good choices, but I'm quite ill-at-ease complaining that one of my own pieces belongs there. I don't mean my comments to be reduced to a petty issue of me, me, me. (And that's Freaky's niche anyway... heh.) So I'll leave that judgment to others and just kind of hope. I really appreciate the promo on your facebook page.
Lulu&Phoebe, thanks to both of you for stopping in. You should get separate accounts so you can each rate me. :)

Lisa, that's very kind of you. I like to think Open Salon does have a national audience, but it depends on them taking that role seriously, I guess.

Verbal, thanks for stopping in to enjoy the poem. And I'm glad the CSS post was able to add some color to your post. That color project is really fun.
Michael, it's really sad that people think that it's a refutation of Global Warming if there's a snowstorm, but I fear there are some that do! I'm glad you enjoyed the poem.

Lunchlady, I'm glad you caught it this time around. It's always good to see new faces in the crowd.
Kent-

awesome poem. The one thing I might add, mostly as an aside, is the fact that no one mentions the fact that climate change and energy are two issues that will do FAR more to decrease health care costs, as far fewer people get sick from fossil fuel related ailments. In theory, if carbon is reduced, and we find a way to replace the reflective properties of the depleted ozone layer, cancer rates will drop dramatically, among other health related issues that have more to do with saving HUMANITY than saving "the planet". The planet will still be here when humanity dies out. Humanity, not so much
I'm plastic so I'll be around a lot longer than you guys -- so I'm wishing you Merry Christmas, and letting you know that I'm worried for you.
Placebo, it's a good point about the health issues. A lot of health problems will happen if Climate Change increases, not to mention lack of food and disease. And the wars that will occur when food gets short won't be good for people either. So it could both get better (as you suggest) and get worse (if we do nothing).

Freaky, it was your prime opportunity to get everything to be about “you, you, you” by just letting us all die out. Plastic or not, it's quite a statement of your humanity to say you're worried about us! Thanks for visiting.
Cool! Gary Baumgarten was kind enough to feature the poem at his PalTalk News Network. Thanks, Gary! Nice choice of picture, too. :)
Placebostudman:

Ozone depletion is not caused by greenhouse gases. You're confusing two seperate phenomenon. Also, what are fossil fuel related ailments?
Ozone is a greenhouse gas, but we need it not to go away from the layer around the planet because in that context it screens out harmful solar radiation.

By the way, I added “Aqua” to the title of this in order to join Will Someone Feed The Cat's call for colors.
Kent!

Loved it, and of course, all the fancy editing. Merry, Merry.
Splendid -- and meaningful. Wishing you a cooler Christmas and a greener New Year.
Interesting how your poem has that magical, childlike feeling while the words are scratching hard underneath. Loved it!
Extremely well done....You should seek to get this published and receive proper notice and compensation for a stellar effort.....



Rated!!!!
Kent, I enjoyed reading this. I must have missed it last year.
Just a note injected in here: Some comments disappeared—by others and myself. (I recall a comment by Hells Bells saying something about it being a labor of love and me responding that yes, it was indeed by a great many people. There may have been a couple of others.) It looks like the dates jump from 25 Dec to 28 Dec, but comments were dribbling in at one or two a day so more may have been lost. It was not my doing. It's possible for a thread owner to delete comments on their own thread, but I didn't do that here. Must have been some database glitch back at the OS factory. Please no posts about censorship. :)
Very nice, Kent. I think my children will enjoy this xoxo
I missed it last year, thanks for reposting

polar bears might as well be dodos to our great-grandchildren, what else will they miss?