Thoughts. . .

NOVEMBER 7, 2009 3:45PM

Following Kathy: Join the Villanelle Train

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After reading Kathy Riordan's beautiful poem today, I was inspired to go back to my college days and take a shot at it:

 

I Thought I Could Remember How to Write a Villanelle

 

I thought I could remember how to write a villanelle

The bird perched on top of the red dying leaf

Looks forward and listens as if he can tell

 

That I do not remember how to conquer this swell

Form that can frustrate so and bring on fits of grief

I thought I could remember how to write a villanelle!

 

Wind whispers to Canada geese as they yell

And fill up the sky for a moment, then each

Looks forward and listens as if he can tell

 

Just what he'll find in the neighboring cell

Of suburbia soccer field, meadow or beach

I thought I could remember how to write a villanelle. 

 

It's only Saturday but I hear a church bell

Ring as a squirrel, while holding the pit of a peach,

Looks forward and listens as if he can tell 

 

That through my brain like a bat out of hell

Run the words that repeat on the page within reach: 

 "I thought I could remember how to write a villanelle.

Looks forward and listens as if he can tell." 

 

Join the train:  post your villanelle for the weekend OSers to enjoy. . .it's like brain exercise. . .

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Done. My villanelle is up. Thanks for helping me remember it!
You can remember and you did! Wow! You actually wrote a nineteen-line poem with two rhymes throughout, consisting of five tercets and a quatrain, with the first and third lines of the opening tercet recurring alternately at the end of the other tercets and with both repeated at the close of the concluding quatrain. I'm impressed! I'll write my own when I can figure out what this means. It's like one of those dreadful math problems written out i paragraph form like if a train is going 55 mph and it has 25 cars each with 7 passengers in each car and you are driving in the opposite direction with 2 passengers in the back seat at 35 mph and have to pay a $1.75 toll every 3 miles, how many hot dogs are there i the lunch car? You know, that kind of thing! RRRRaaaated.
Ken, loved your villanelle!

Joan: See, the difference between those math problems and the villanelle is that writing poetry leaves you feeling energized (no matter how bad it is, if you conquered the rhyme scheme you feel like a success!) while math problems just leave you feeling drained.
Go ahead, try one! I bet you'll surprise yourself!
Nicely done. I had to look up "villanelle," which shows you how close I got to a poetry class.
Joan, you are an insufferable show-off;)
But at least now I don't have to ask what the hell you guys are all talking about.

Thank you for these. They're kinda cool. The construct makes my brain hurt, but they're kinda cool.
Thanks for starting this train rolling, Karin. Happy to see my villanelle from this morning inspired more.
Oh jeez, this is like the BDSM of poetry. It's a lovely poem, as was Kathy's, but Karin, you're really showing off here by following the rules and making it funny at the same time. Reminds me of Victor Borge.

Well done.
I'm on board!
This is fun (your poem) (and villanelles)
A brain exercise indeed. This form is not for the faint of heart!

Thank you for sharing yours.