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Lunchlady 2

Lunchlady 2
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March 05
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I have been here, oh my, 2 or 3 years and in that time I have seen my youngest daughter wed and have my first beautiful granddaughter. I have seen a son join the Navy and fly away and I have buried my oldest son. This makes two sons I have lost and right now the world seems unfair and harsh but someday I will smile again and remember the good times more than the bad. Did I mention the alcoholic husband who has been in the hospital three times near death...it makes me wonder much about why some live, yet don't, and some die who are just starting to live. Out of 6 children I still have 4 and they are the light of my life....

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DECEMBER 19, 2009 7:48PM

Christmas Morning

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She woke up with a start. Where was she? Her heart was racing and she was trying to remember, when she felt someone in bed with her. She sat bolt upright and he sat up with her. He was talking but she couldn't focus, she heard screaming and realized it was herself. The man was gently shaking her and talking softly. She was trying to calm but she could remember nothing. She was blank.

Slowly she could see him. His tall dark features and that smile, where had she seen that smile before? He was holding her close and stroking her hair and telling her everything was alright now. How did she know him? If only she could remember.

As she sat there beside him she felt peace emanating from him. Was that love too? Why couldn't she remember?

He laid her down, while she nestled in his arms her mind started to clear.

She remembered a wonderful life but then something wasn't right. There was a car crash, both her loving husband and only child killed instantly. But what of her, why was everything so fuzzy?

She had glimpse's of tubes and lines with her connected to them. Why was she just lying there? Why couldn't anyone hear her? Why wouldn't anyone listen?

At this point she felt the man hold her closer and he began to stroke her hair. It felt so good, so welcome.

Then there was yelling and crying. Not from her but from outside her. She felt someone pulling on her and holding her tight. She thought to herself why won't they let me go?

As the man held her close she felt another, a smaller one. He was climbing up beside them in the bed. He was nestling up beside her for warmth maybe. Who was this?

Then the wailing and crying and she was thinking  again why won't they let me go. Why do they keep me here. Is this where I belong?

Then she saw the light, the bright beautiful light and she started to float, it seemed, towards it. As she glanced back she saw her mother and her sisters all standing around a bed. Who were they looking at? Wait, it was her lying there in the bed surrounded by machines and tubes and the Dr and nurses were frantically working around her. She felt sad for her mom and her sisters and started back.

That's when she heard his voice. Her husband, the man she loved and she heard a voice crying mama and knew it was her beloved son.

At this spot she had to chose, she knew it. She could stay for her mother and sisters or she could go home one last time.

She rolled over and with a clear head hugged her husband and gathered her son in her arms and smothered him with kisses.

Then they climbed out of bed together and walked down the steps to a world where Christmas never ended and love and faith abounded.

 She was home at last.

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Be gentle, I am not a writer! But I had this in my head, don't know why, so I wrote it. First try ever so I know it's not that writingly perfect but I hope it's enjoyable none the less.
My first work of fiction...maybe the last, who knows
And a beautiful first work it is....xox
Robin, thanks your sweet!
This was great. Great first effort. I liked the way it flowed and could feel the tug of decision pulling her both ways.
Trilogy, thank you for being so kind. I am glad you liked it. I was kind of afraid to post it but thought I might as well jump in.
"Jumping in" is EXACTLY the way I like writing described! Great timing and flow for me here. I totally get the sensation of being so torn. The past yearned for, the present demanding, and the future hopeful. I'm thankful the present is lovingly embraced!
You conveyed her the scene and her feelings so believably -- I could relate to her indecision. Keep up the good work!
Really gripping, and almost made me misty. This is good, you did a fine job. My best to you, older/exasperated
Marie, thank you for stopping by and your kind critique of my first ever story.
mginmn, thank you too for your kindness. I am so happy you could find a way to relate to this. Must mean I succeeded right?
Older/exasperated, made you misty, that I will take as a compliment. Thank you
LL, you really must write more fiction! This is a lovely story, one I think many could relate to--if not for themselves, then for loved ones who've made the decision your protagonist did. As others have said, it flows well, the tension is palpable--and the decision made is one that makes sense in the context. Good work! Keep it up! Rated. D
Yarn Over, thank you, I love that you liked this, my first ever story! It means more than I can say..Almost sounds like I had you not knowing how it would end. That's really cool..
This is a beautiful piece with unexpectedly calming effect.
Rated.
Wow! Wow. Just a wonderful wow.

You're a writer!! WAKE UP!!! :)

And pfffft on perfect. If I want perfect, I'll go uh, well, I don't know where, but....

:)
Keep it up! This is a safe place
Who says you are not a writer??
That was an amazing story. Powerful. Encore!
Compelling read, LL! Powerful and very real. As trilogy said, we can feel the conflict in her. Great, great, great!
This was so good. Not knowing it was fiction, I thought it really happened to you in an earlier time. I'm glad it was just great writing!
R~
Beautiful sentiments LL, I hope this is what happens. Best to you,
Well hell, Lady. If this is your first, I'm surely sticking around for future installments. Awesome writing kiddo. Awesome.
Thoth, calming effects I am surprised and thankful
Tink, you really liked it! I think that's what you meant :)
Dr. Spudman, thank you I like safe places
kitehlips, welcome and thank you
athomepilgrim, thank you, powerful,wow
Scanner, thank you so much I am so surprised
Rita, Thanks!
Boomer Bob, I know I keep saying thank you but I am so suprised by the comments this afternoon I can think of nothing else to say!
Elena, I made you cry, I am speechless...
I did not expect this kind of comments. I thought maybe a few would read and maybe tell me where I went wrong. I am stunned. I really hope another story comes to me some day so I can try this again. Something about the power of making up anothers life makes them real.