Foolish Monkey

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*************************** *************************** WARNING: what you read at noon is NEVER the same poem or post a few hours later. I can't help myself. I like to noodle. HELPFUL SUGGESTION: if you like what you've read (and even if you didn't), come back in a day or two. It'll be better. In fact, if you hated it, you must come back and read it again because it will definitely be better. *************************** "I find that I am so excited I can barely sit still or hold a thought in my head. I think it's the excitement only a free man can feel, a free man at the start of a long journey whose conclusion is uncertain" -Red in The Shawshank Redemption, Stephen King ***************************

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OCTOBER 29, 2009 12:36PM

The Tinder Box Addendum: Updated

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as the earth crashes open, down down they fall entwined.   a sudden blessed blast of air and she has wings.   her body turns in space and in a moment she floats from him..  

they are falling, a distance so great there is no gravity.  it is as if they are standing still.  

 

he reaches towards her and she arches, long hair cradling, a veil in a soft breeze, it blocks her movement as she tilts just so and eludes. now each are falling alone towards light below and perhaps salvation.

 

it is like this for what seems eternity.  perhaps that is how long they fall, there is no way to for us to know.  

she cries remembering the great flood of her tears, how they washed and then split the earth in two forcing them to tumble down into the great chasm as they were swallowed whole.  

she remembers his terrible mouth, how he would come to her over and over again, eyes growing larger with a mad desire to devour her.  she shivers with cold, even as she can feel the fire of him emanating in waves of fury and frustration.  he is always too close, never far enough away.  

as they fall he is perfectly still, making not a sound but imperceptably reaching towards her with long tentacle fingers,  holding her gaze as he tries again and again to touch her, to take her.    

she turns her gaze away, stricken with sadness.  he was never a dream but true, those eyes shining with malice and even joy.  she is too innocent to know it is not his nature to care where or how they were nearly destroyed.   it is beyond him to consider it.  nor can he think of anything but how he will hold her, possess her again.   for this creature of darkness there are no rules or reason.  there never were. 

 

after a time she drifts to sleep and peace comes as she is relieved of all sorrow and fear.  settling within her dream she sails once more through calmness but now to vivid colors and a sense of peace.  she sees herself bathed in light as she croons to the earth.  she can taste honey and white clouds.  she is free. 

 

but darkness will wait forever

cunning he sees she sleeps and stretches his impossible fingers to grasp her quiet still form.  clutching her now, ahhh, he thinks as he encircles her wrists.    he surrounds her so completely like a black cloak until all that can be seen as they descend in stillness is a great dark figure with enormous glowing eyes and within it’s core, her light of truest white flickering flickering, falling.

 


 

 

she lay in the prison of his arms listening for a heart that is not there, hoping to hear him breathe but he will never.  What is this beast with enormous eyes like platters, like wheels, like worlds of destruction, death, hate and possession? 

they each sense they are falling faster now.  in his fear and excitement he grips tighter.  it is coming to an end.  she accepts there is only death to save her from him.

finally a crash and his great body stiffens around her, his last and greatest possession of her in fact saves her as the force of impact thrusts her from his grasp, throwing her into darkness.  he is unconscious, bleeding, perhaps mortally wounded.  perhaps he will someday find her and beg for forgiveness, but this is another story. now he is nearly dead. 

she is alive. the stillness of the night and her body are strange to her.  she gently runs her hands over her face, her arms, her legs, her stomach and feels no blood, no pain.   perhaps she is safe, she can not know.  

and what is safe? only a word so foreign to her, she discards it.

she is alone.  her tears have opened the earth, perhaps they have saved her.  she lay on a soft bed of moss she has been graced with and permits herself to cry with happiness.  she does not know where she is, but she senses she is safe now and waits for the dawn.  she need not dream anymore.  she can live.

  

 

 


 

(click below to read part one and a short essay on writing these two pieces)

The Tinder Box (a modern fairy tale with no fairies)

Some thoughts on learning to write (The Tinder Box)

whistler falling-rocket

art at page top: Antony Gormley, "Still Falling"  

painting at page bottom: Whistlers "Falling Rockets"

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is this why their victims grow up with big pieces of their childhood memories blotted out?

not only is the narrative beautiful to read, but your accompanying illustrations are spot on. (Is that carving what inspired you?)
the illustrations were simply artworks I picked up on the web tubes when i was searching with keywords. when one seemed right, I grabbed it.

My inspiration was The Tinder Box. For years, I have always wondered about dogs with "eyes the size of saucers" and women being carried off into the night on their backs.

One day a few weeks ago, i started writing this story...I just let it flow and this is where it went.

then yesterday I realized I didn't want my little girl to die, to be cast down in darkness forever. that she must put up a fight. so perhaps she will.
I like what you're doing with this . . . and let it flow . . . this time, you have complete control over the ending . . .
Absolutley stunning to read..............Just blows me away the depth of it.
owl, thank you. I'm quite intrigued with this now. I did not want her to expire in a flood of tears although that might be perfect and very japanese. I shall try hard to bring her to her righteous end.
lunchlady, thank you so much. I'm quite touched by all this generosity and support. :)
Stunning imagery and a powerfully told tale. Thank you for sharing this with the rest of us.
How am I supposed to make a wiseass comment about a post like this?

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You are a great writer. And the story ain't bad either!!
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Torman, I'm happy you're enjoying it. It's constantly being updated because it's bigger than (I think) my technical skills. So the fact that wonderful writers like yourself appreciate it, means a great deal to me. Thank you so much.
LittleWillie, you always make me laugh. In this case, since this is so serious and dark, instead of a comment, you might rend your hair. Or maybe someone else's (in the spirit of this thing).


Scanner, I'm trying goodness knows...I'm really giving it all I have. I'm so pleased you're enjoying it.
Daaaaamn. I knew it was what I thought it was when I thought it was what it was.