this is my poem, a dream, a time
through which my body moves
seen through my eyes are naked trees
that green and flower in my wake
in this dream my step is soft light
I make no disturbance
drifting through verdant lace shifting slowly
I am in awe of such perfection
for I am not perfect
as I float through a dream
perhaps not my dream
perhaps someone else’s
perhaps I am not there at all
or maybe I am a dream, a poem
a song of dreams for now
Odilon Redon, The Buddha
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that green and flower in my wake"
I wonder what it means that nature comes alive as you pass? Are you a gift, like the springtime? For me, I'd have to say yes...you have brought much light to me. Your footsteps here are soft.
This poem/dream truly is you. (To me.)
Lovely, Monkey.
It's so refreshing to see people writing real poetry and not that "slam" sing-songy stuff that passes for poetry now. It's urban, it's hip, and a hundred years from now, it will be forgotten.
This is memorable. I write so much when I get in OS, I sometimes forget to read. I'm glad i paused long enough to read this. Thanks for making me "see" through your eyes. You have a gift.
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A BIG THANK YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
thank you for your kind words.
swoman,
I'm pleased that you enjoyed it
outside,
thank you so much. am I a gift? I think no more, no less than any of us who move through this life and all it's waystations.
chuck,
yes, indeed! I like that. :)
diva,
I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I tried very hard to be delicate. a dream poem came to me in the middle of the night but I didn't write it down and went back to sleep. when I woke, I tried to write it but instead of what I (vaguely) recall I dreamt wasnt' what popped out this AM.
thank you.
scanner,
you are very kind for saying so.
Rated.
you people are wonderful. I'm so glad you've enjoyed my poem.
Frank,
I'm glad you liked it. (you can get swoony and drifty on my blog any time.)
Torman,
I've read that. and does it matter? really? it's nice to be alive to dream, to wake.
Leonde,
thank you.
Owl,
many thanks. I am beginning to enjoy this process a LOT.
Lea,
You are very very kind to say that. Thank you for stopping by to read my poem.
Smithery,
I can tell you writing it was a dreamy as reading it.
Barking,
I'm really pleased you enjoyed it. Paws back at you.
Unbreakable,
Thank you for your kind words. They mean a lot.
All of your comments mean a lot to me.
And any time you feel you want to give me a crit or a comment that is more constructive and less complimentary, I want you to feel free to do that because I appreciate all input.
Thank you all so much!!