Foolish Monkey

Foolish Monkey
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*************************** *************************** WARNING: what you read at noon is NEVER the same poem or post a few hours later. I can't help myself. I like to noodle. HELPFUL SUGGESTION: if you like what you've read (and even if you didn't), come back in a day or two. It'll be better. In fact, if you hated it, you must come back and read it again because it will definitely be better. *************************** "I find that I am so excited I can barely sit still or hold a thought in my head. I think it's the excitement only a free man can feel, a free man at the start of a long journey whose conclusion is uncertain" -Red in The Shawshank Redemption, Stephen King ***************************

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DECEMBER 4, 2009 11:35AM

Chapter 3: Just Get Yourself Free (fiction Friday)

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dashboard

 

They watched Julia on the motel TV as she awkwardly removed a hunk of meat from a big pot with tongs, being all Juliasweet and advising and fussing and you could jealously taste the rich deliciousness of the whole thing, even in black and white..

“Damn”, he said, “That looks good.  I’m hungry”

When the show ended and she bid them “bon appétit”, they put on their jackets and walked to the retro diner next door where a young waitress gave them nickels to put in the little jukebox on the formica table.  

Ordering burgers and fries, coffee for her, coke for him, they played their nickels and listened to the music.  They had learned one another’s names and told one another some of their stories as she drove.  Now was the end of day one.  It had been a good day.  

Within the warm intimacy of the front seat of her old car, they talked for hours when they weren’t watching the country fly by, awkwardly at first but soon spilling forth liquidly, permitting themselves the luxury of an illusion: that they were actually understood and could see each other, through their stories,  sharing them until the light faded.  By night they knew they would travel together west, each carrying their lifetime of savings and losses, 19 years for him, 63 years of hers, enough to sustain them for a journey.  

They were not lovers and they would never be.  The bond they shared was destiny: two ships had passed in the night, twin Titanics.  And what they were were strangers who had reached over the edge of each to grab on to the other's hand, to save one another's lives. 

They finished their food and sipped their drinks as each enjoyed the novelty of the moment, the surprising pleasantness.  Neither had even considered this scenario, a friendship of such disparate years taking root in this short and unlikely time and place.  And that they might be renewed and protected with such a friend close by watching.    

 


ADDENDUM:

this isn't a finish. still, I couldn't let it sit and simmer without some sort of punctuation mark.   a half finished chapter (I consider these "chapters" portions of a chapter) gives me the willies.   I had a pressing need to "do something", the death of anything!  can't force it but I couldn't let it be.  I did know that these two would be friends and a road trip might be their salvation.  or perhaps someone will be burying a body under a full moon in Montana.  

so this will continue when it continues.  

in the meantime, you say goodbye and I say hello!   

 

These are the first two chapters of this ongoing Penny Dreadful: 

 

Chapter One: 50 Ways to Leave

Chapter Two: Make a New Plan, Stan

 

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road trips can be healing. they can also tear you a new asshole but perhaps that's for a future chapter. for today, for fiction friday, I will let these two drive peacefully into the sunset.

for now.

bumpity

*bump*
But how far do they drive? Well done. ~R~
well I figure I can drive 10/11 hours with breaks for food, bathroom, leg stretches....so figure 500 to 600 miles per day on a good day. bad weather, bad roads, detours, yadayada, maybe half that. maybe they're on their way to south america. maybe they'll turn around and drive up north and around the world. or south.
for now mime.

I wanted to have a chapter end. I don't feel this is a finish, but more a wrap up. I get itchy if I feel I have to finish something, so I thought, let me send them off so I can mull this for a time...
I'll bet they get a flat tire before they get out of town. Road trips are like that sometimes. At least for me. Now I have to go read the other chapters. Sorry I missed them.
Mike...no. no flat tires. that's too real. maybe they'll run over a state trooper. THAT could be interesting. in Nebraska. oh yeah.
the nickels and the jukebox are a great touch!
I like the whole series Monkey.
I don't want an ending. How about continuing?
This could be a book ya know....
psyche,

Johnny Rocket is a diner franchise that pops up here and there...we have one here in town. they give you nickels when you sit down and if you play aretha's "respect" when the song comes on, the entire waitstaff and counter people have to come out and dance to it. it's fun until you actually think about it.

mission,
I'm glad you like it but I think it's not up to snuff now. I think I got a good running start but now I feel like I copped out. I don't like copping out. it needs salt. it's too sweet.

I can see it becoming a book, a cheesy best seller. I see me selling the movie rights and becoming a rich old broad, tooling on down to florida with hubbins and dog in my new convertible to pay you a visit and share some pizza.