Nine thousand
Dollars.
Four thousand
Dollars.
Six hundred
Dollars.
The price of my eggs.
Fifty
Needles
Three
Needles
250 mg
Needles.
Twice a day
In my leg.
Three months
Waiting.
Four days
Waiting.
Twelve days
Waiting.
Two months
It's dead.
And... again.
( The last line...Mark's suggestion... I think it works.)
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Comments
One suggestion - the last sentence interrupts your rhythm. It's too long. One word would pack your prose:
Again?
or
if you want finality:
Again.
I agree with Mark's comment. The one word alone seems good, whichever punctuation you use.
;-)
.
maybe the best stuff comes out when your brain is overemotional explosion-ness. :-)
The words work fine!!!
But who am I?
BEST POET EVER ACCORDING TO THE NATIONAL CONGRESS OF POETRY!! Whoo!! ;)
(We won't speak of me and wifey's baby trying....it didn't work, so we just spoil the neighbors' kids! More fun!! Get them hyped up on sugar and send them back home!! Teehee!! :D)