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Rose Norton

Rose Norton
Location
Methow Valley, Washington, US
Birthday
December 31
Title
Hey, you!
Company
La Casa, Inc.
Bio
I'm a domestically impaired mother suffering from chronic SAHM syndrome, an aspiring humorist, and semi-avid runner. I'm the mother of two feral children, a three-legged dog, and a deaf cat, but we all have special needs in our own little way.

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Salon.com
JULY 7, 2011 2:15AM

Fiction Wednesday: Tea for Three

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Outside the world was parched. The back acres waved and buckled like corpses. The morning air crept into the kitchen window sluggishly. Lainey wiped her swollen and stung hands on her apron. The children played quietly in wait for their grandfather to show signs of life from the bedroom above. 

 

Lainey prayed silently, then cursed her unanswered prayers as they echoed in footsteps. The patriarch shook the windows with his large boots overhead. 

 

“Alive,” she mourned, squashing a spider in the sink. 

 

The children rattled, too. The oldest, Beth, padded into the kitchen and gouged a finger into the draining honeycomb, earning her a slap from her mother. Lainey winced. She wanted to smatter her daughter in apologetic kisses, but grandfather was awake and required breakfast. 

 

The footsteps stumbled down the stairs and assumed a damp and foreboding form. He looked like a gigantic grub, fresh from the earth, wet and soiled, smelling of putrified flowers and liquor. 

 

From behind the grub crept a girl, younger and prettier than Lainey. Her face was less marred than Lainey’s. He had been kind. The girl wore a sickly shade of rose perfume. It was the signature scent of all his girls. She had been the third and last of his night--a night that lingered in Lainey and her children’s minds--filled with grunts and whimpers of various shapes and sizes. 

 

Lainey set another plate. 

 

The children went to play within the miserly shade of the cherry tree. The elderly grub went to relieve himself, leaving Lainey and the girl. As they sat, a four-legged beast, mangled and dark, perched between them and writhed. 

 

Lainey and the girl did not address the beast. Rather, they stared into their teacups: Lainey’s, chipped and brown; the girl’s, glistening china. 

 

They each sat, remorse clinging to their bodies. The girl squeezed a $10 bill in her soiled dress pocket. Lainey’s belly shuddered with life. 

 

“Keeping you has a price, Lainey,” the fat man had told her, imposing himself within her. “Jr. ain’t here, and he ain’t coming.”

 

His last letter came from Paris. His father snickered and warned that once Jr. had a taste of Paris his appetite would never let him leave. It was true: Many soldiers stayed. But Lainey knew he would be back. His ship would bring him back a hero. 

 

Her husband would return. Lainey watered her tea leaves. 


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Welcome aboard the Wednesday Fiction train! Oh those grubs will make you creep and crawl every time. Liked the use of a powerful voice, in what, on the outside would seem to be a weak Lainey.
See you next week.
R
Ms. Rose Norton,

As a method of gratitude an in the spirit of 'Open Salonesque' reciprocity, I divested the best light of this rare July morning reading your blog. 'Tea for Three' your most recent spins about with multiple 'flash' jingle-jangles. Damn (no comma!) good...

(en Toto) (what? comeon spell ck!)
More than a few laughs, let me tell you! Firstly your name is fascinating. 'Rose' of course beautifully, eternally aesthetic/literate and then coupled with 'Norton' --- the legendary big bike--- that even the most prodigal of our leather-clad brethren two-wheelers just say and let the word hang-glide with a consistent pause as though the symbol itself-- 'Norton'-- at some juncture is as ephemeral as a metal-flake animal airborne. (Uncertain how I fell into this mechanical analogy as I don't own a motorcycle--maybe there's something here--'Zen and the Angst of Television'?)

Ms. Erma Whats-Her-Name ain't got nothing on you!
@ OoaL- Thank you! I'm looking forward to the next "meeting"!
@JP- Heehee. Thank you. In the spirit of big machinery, I always cringed at my name ("Hey, Rosie!") and envisioned myself as a bullish truck driver of a woman. Only in the last few years have I taken on the "Rose" aesthetic as a soft, feminine challenge. No luck so far. C'est la vie.

Erma! I am to Erma as Nadya Suleman is to Angelina. Just a low-rent wannabe. But I definitely appreciate the remark! ;)
there are at least 2 critical things going on here:

tone is controlled/owned at the outset and maintained;

if the reader is lazy, then they are not going to get it.

this is a respectful standard for literature.

note: good on OUT ON A LIMB & J.P. HART
for their robust comments
This was as vivid as it was disturbing. What good can come of all this? The centerpiece is the extended "grub" metaphor, wonderfully accented by the spider squashed in the sink. I think I am most disturbed by the "grub" "imposing himself within her".
R
Thanks so much for participating in Fiction Wednesday! This was so, so well done - love the descriptions, so many using unpleasant insects - just great evocation of the ambiance. I hope Jr. will come home soon, or that Lainey can get out of there some other way!
ume- thank you for your comment. i didn't want to make it too convoluted, but i hope to write in a way to press a reader for understanding.
Ash- i'm glad that this creeped someone else other me. sometimes the faulknerian heat of the summer does things to our brains...at least mine. the challenge to write in a different style/tone was difficult and enjoyable!
Alysa- thank you! i'm not a bug person, but the story called for all the stuff that makes us squirm.

Thank you, everyone, for reading this!