SEPTEMBER 1, 2009 2:59PM

The check will hold him.

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He went out into the barn’s slanty light. He contemplated the shotgun. Sat holding the check and feeling its physicality, thinking, the check will hold me.  It has to. 

Wanting only to go to town, watch the young girls with their tangerine breasts with sunflower seed nipples and waves and waves of hair, fill himself up on that and call it lunch.

She watches from the window, the silence of the children loud behind her, the ring on her finger tightening as if in warning.   It falls to her to explain him in all his bent consciousness.  An explanation that will make her a liar in the cubist tradition, presenting a different angle on their particular truth

 Outside where the car used to be there is a canoe, hollowed from a tree by his own hands.  It is guarded by a dog, its brown eyes deep with mystery. 

She breathes deeply, the air in her chest like energy or god or life itself, and turns to face them.

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First! But still absorbing this one.
I have to imagine this sort of stress is weighing on a lot of poor families right now. It's a daily struggle for the poor under the best of economic times. During down times, the poor are the first to suffer. The mother having to explain away the father's shortcomings to the children is especially troubling. A man feels worthless when willing and able and wanting to work for his family, yet no jobs will come. I think about this often and can identify with them all.
Haunting and mysterious as your writing so often is! you convey a lot in a short space, something I admire (I can be too wordy).
cubist tradition.... your writing often comes to me in different angles, always making me think, reread, and think some more.
love most the "liar in the cubist tradition" line. Excellent work, Sandra. So worth my time ;)
What a combination of images . . . haunting and vivid and concentrated. Wow.
This is a story that is repeated seemingly weekly here. We are losing family farms at an alarming rate, while the huge agri-conglomerates just keep falling forward inexorably, going through them like a scythe through summer hay.

I worry when I see this happening, and can't help but think the end result will be something like Soylent Green. Frankly, it scares me.

You've said so much by saying so little. Sandra, I love your writing and your soul.
This is just brilliant, Sandra. In so few words, you have hit a universal emotional moment we see and hear everyday right now. Brava. xox
You set up the tableau with such richness and economy, then leave us with many paths that our imaginations can take to continue the story. So few of which turn out well.
Mr. Potter says "why you're worth more dead than alive, George."

Hee haw!
There will always be many angles to our particular truths....we see it a great deal in business, in real estate, but perhaps most prolific in adolescents and restless spouses...
Lovely Sandra
This is heavy duty, Sandra! Catching my breath...
I think I'm going to cry now.
Damn, Sandra. You've done it again.
This reminds me of a William Carlos Williams poem.
Thank you everyone for your attention and your kind comments. Gary, you always make me wish I would have thought that.
Lea, I don't deserve that comparison but I'll relish it all the same. Lainey, that's high praise considering the value I put on my own time, so thank you especially for that.
You writing makes my heart ache! This was beautifully realistic and sad! A few words saying soooo much!
their tangerine breasts with sunflower seed nipples and waves and waves of hair, fill himself up on that and call it lunch.

I might have to steal that some day when you're not looking. . . .
I have nothing left to say. Everybody else beat me to it. Just so, so.... you.
Wow, I could feel the emotion and sadness of both the man and the woman from their vantage points. Reminded me of Steinbeck... Love your stuff. rated
I like the way you used the device of another art form to reveal this painting. I don't like the way you left me with all these damned questions -- you're a devil, but a very talented one!
Wow. What a beautiful image you've place before us. Very, very well-written. You're a craftswoman of words, Sandra. Rated.
Buy as much as you can from your local farmers, even if you have to pay a little more money, it's money that will stay in your community. The food will taste better too, and will probably be healthier as well. Support programs to assist and preserve the farms in your area. Farms are the heart and soul of America.
oooooooooh you're good Sandra!