Those Five Little Words

scupper

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MARCH 2, 2010 9:14PM

Rate: 16 Flag

Fire, Cloak, Far, Spit, Kiss

You've gone too far.

Do you remember the night

we signed up for Second Life?

I arrived there without clothes.

You gave me your cloak.

We gave our virtual selves time.

You led me to a ring.

I felt your kiss.

Your burning kiss,

our spit eclipsed,

my avatar a'fire.

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Howling at the moon over this.....

cartouche

March 02, 2010 09:25 PM

there's a hush (in my head) when i read this. maybe it's stillness. calm. & i like it.

Renatta Laundry

March 02, 2010 09:29 PM

Bbee-autiful ...

Scarlett Sumac

March 02, 2010 09:42 PM

Love how you matched the song with this!

Sparking

March 02, 2010 09:43 PM

Uber rated for Ray Charles & Ring of Fire.

Nick Carraway

March 02, 2010 09:50 PM

What a cool idea, a virtual reality. Is it the word "cloak" that took you there?

Hells Bells

March 02, 2010 10:00 PM

A five words hello,
Pink summer inside a writer's trance..
Nice post

GREEKWRITER IN NEED

March 02, 2010 10:32 PM

Nice....very nice.

I Love Life

March 02, 2010 10:34 PM

Woohoo! HAWT! xox

Robin Sneed

March 02, 2010 11:01 PM

scupper,
whoa...this is something. thank you.

Jill McLaughlin

March 02, 2010 11:30 PM

Bad ass. In the very best way! (This song used to freak me out when I was a kid -- the Johnny Cash version -- because I didn't know what it meant and the down down down meshed with the hell from my Sunday School class.)

Bellwether Vance

March 02, 2010 11:43 PM

Hot! Where's my fan?

Painting The Stars

March 03, 2010 03:11 AM

Nice.

AtHomePilgrim

March 03, 2010 06:07 AM

Oh yes . . .

Owl_Says_Who

March 03, 2010 09:25 AM

original, memorable: "my avatar a'fire. "

Greg Correll

March 03, 2010 11:23 AM

yes, but ' spit ' - what have i missed, scupper ?

Kim Gamble

March 03, 2010 11:54 AM

avatar a'fire? nice...

NOVAcatmando

March 03, 2010 02:23 PM

niceeeeeeeee

diary of a food addict

March 03, 2010 03:50 PM

Beautiful poem, and so "new milennium." Love the song too. I like the Elvis Costello version as well, though I have seen it maligned on this very site.