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APRIL 18, 2010 10:14PM

While I Lay Sleeping

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You came to me again last night
while I lay sleeping.
You with your cropped blonde hair
and simple smile
You at three on the  fairy swing at the fair.
 
You came to me again last night
while I lay sleeping.
You with water up to your neck
bobbing at ten in summer
in the pool at the beach house we'd rented
yelling "Marco" or calling "Polo." 
 
You came to me again last night
while I lay sleeping.
You with your sassy seventh grade twist
your clarinet at your side 
your request asking,
"please can I go to your house today?"
 
You came to me again last night
while I lay sleeping.
You with your long blonde hair
as you entered ninth grade.
You peering over a menu
with double shot questions,
"Is it really our special day?"
"Can I really order anything I want?"
 
You came to me again last night
and I lay sleeping. 
You came
and I lay sleeping.
You came.
I lay sleeping.
I lay sleeping.
I lay sleeping. 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
Scupper © 4/2010

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wake up!
no, it's cool, dreams are better than waking sometimes.
just being quiet with you.

r.
Dianaani, Charlie,
Thank you for commenting. I posted this because I am celebrating that I was sleeping. Finally, the wonderful without the turbulence. I was sleeping.
Thank you again for commenting and for the quiet.
I love the way you ended it. Oh, I enjoyed it all, but you got me with the last verse.
R
So beautiful... thanks.
Kisses,
Marcela
Thank you Mustard. Thank you.

Buffy, the last lines will also come to you. Your recent post on how you are coming along was especially strong.
I'm not much on poetry but I loved this one. Well done.
...sigh. Much love to you and rated.
SheilaTGTG55 said it. Yes, haunting. Tear drop flowers in the night.
Just wonderful...and I'm glad you're sleeping...xox
sleeping = peace, for awhile.
I love the photo and the poem was beautiful.I want to take a nap in your head,it seems you always have something interesting going on in there.
Sleep- the soothing balm of tortured souls... Your refrain reflects the calm, even breathing of a sleeping person. Poignant yet peaceful.
Rated.
Perchance to dream.
And what dreams may come!
So nice to sleep, to dream, well done, very well done.
To sleep, perchance to dream . . . sleep is sometimes the balm. Blessings, scupper. This piece is so resonant and beautiful.
I long to see my loved ones in dreams, to hear their voices now silenced. I am saddened that this young girl is only here now in dreams. Aching tribute.
This reminds me a bit of "Elegy for Jane":
http://www.poetryconnection.net/poets/Theodore_Roethke/2429
(No connection w/ Jane of my last post.)
I'm lulled, and dumbfounded. Is the picture you, or your daughter ?

I loved the words, but I'm struggling with the image - is it / was it you ? Like Billy Collins said : at this point I need help.

But maybe that's just me.

I thought there was something darker going on, at the end, but then that's just the way I read it.

I'm glad you're sleeping well.
particularly enjoyed the use of the flashback technique in this piece.
Thank you for your kind comments. This poem is one in a series in memory of my niece.

Another poem: http://open.salon.com/blog/scupper/2010/01/04/one_silver_vandoren_optimum_ligature
Love the feel and the move of this piece...it is a precious move in time, with much love and fondness. Thank-you for this, lovely