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Amanda Gulledge

Amanda Gulledge
Birthday
April 27
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MAY 11, 2010 5:28PM

Platinum Tears

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ring

Married under soldier

swords

They share a love that runs

deep

and true

Some call him

Doctor

Some call him

Colonel

But daddy is all I

knew

Mama blonde

bombshell

Made him fall

hard

It wasn't her

looks

that he

loved

Her heart is

gold

She writes like the

wind

Together they are

lovers

family

best friends

 Daddy got sleepy 

driving

van tumbled out of 

view

Call to check on

 them hear

                                                                  twisted metal

round the 

bend

Mama's body

rearranged

Drive through

fog

Squint through

rain

Daddy says,

She's hurt her hand

But something doesn't

ring

true

Flashing lights

ambulance

Glass in

blonde

bloodied 

hair

Daddy's face

buried in his

hands

Mama wheeled

into the

room

Nurses all seem

gloom

Mama smiles so

brightly

  Daddy leaves the 

room

look at

Mama

What is

wrong

one arm

gone

Follow daddy

fast

Down the

hall

Outside to the

deli

Sitting in

booth

Not hungry at

all

Nothing would

suit

our

bellies

Never once

have I

Seen him

cry

Never a tear for

life

That day he sat

across from

me 

Mourning the

lost arm of his

wife

I did this to 

her

I fell 

asleep

I don't deserve to 

live

I can't go on without that

hand

It's the one that I held for 

years

Where will they put

that hand I

love?

It's mine I love it

so

They'll throw it

away

ring and

all

He screamed and 

cried

oh, oh

I want that

hand

with the platinum

band

I gave her long

ago

Oh, oh

I love her

so

 

parents

 

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Wow....I'm speechless (in a very good way).
This was truly heartbreaking to read. I can not imagine what your poor father must have felt.
A shot through the heart. And I know exactly what this meant:

"I don't deserve to live"

A beautiful piece, Amanda, R.
Oh man. Dammit! I don't like feeling this way!

Beautifully done, Amanda.
I'm in awe. Perfection.
a hug for your father, he never meant to do it
a hug for your mom, she couldn't change what happened
a hug for you, that you must try to hold them up
Amanda, you know how much I love this. The title haunts me for some reason...(hug) _r
Amanda, you turned an unbearably sad story into a beautiful piece of art.
Lezlie
Not just beautiful, a fantastic piece..
Hugs , wet kleenex nose blows and rated
I navigate away changed.
Whoa. The extreme form was effective at making me feel speed, racing down toward something.
I have no words to justify this.

-R-
Is this true? It's so, so heartbreaking.
wow...this is emotional but my goodness, there are moments in this that are utterly brilliant. utterly stop your heart brilliant. and I mean it. (jealousing here)
Oi, Amanda!
We are truly a community of strangers forging bonds with virtual ink. And then something like this, oh, I cannot believe your parents went through this pain, and Amanda always smiling, always sassy, always heart-breakingly beautiful, oh she's got sadness hidden so well, it only shows how beautiful inside she is...
I hope healing will come.
Narcolepsy is such a strange afflcition. I wish he hadn't blamed himself so much as the dis-ease. Just like a Mom though, to try and downplay it as it's happening "smiling so brightly" through the crisis. We do that...

Beautiful Amanda.
Metal open call? I loved this the first time. Really beautiful, Amanda.
Gorgeous. Just gorgeous, ms Amanda G-r
Yes, I remember when you posted this for the Metal Open Call. It's as good the second time around.
Aside from what your words said, the form and beat of the words drew me in and held on with a vengence. As to the story...speechless...
Amanda, I don't know what to say.
You've captured his guilt ridden mind and heart so well...and his heart break.
This is very heartwrenching, yet beautifully told. ~R~
I LOVE this Amanda. Great job! R. So many surprises and emotions.
True story? Great love!

Buffy
What a rollercoaster ride, Amanda. Absolutely heartbreaking.
Beautifully done as it lets the reader weave through the images.
I remember this, or something very like it. Heart-stopping. Your mother is beautiful, in and out of the nutshell.

Your father...oh, the pain.
On May 8, fourty years ago I had to identify the bodies of four people that were sort of room mates. I stayed there on occasion.

Truma does stick with you with all of it's force and terror.
I love it, but hope it is not real. If it is I am sorry!