Verbal Remedy AKA Denise

Verbal Remedy AKA Denise
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Del Mar, California, The One That's In A State Of Steep Decline
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January 18
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Columnist, http://www.doesthismakesense.com
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Much preferred to the alternative.
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Born. Grew up. Kept growing up. Started growing older. Still at both the growing up and growing older. Stay tuned.

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APRIL 29, 2010 12:38PM

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Photo 15

 

Wrapped in a tiny winter coat and extra layers of deception, transferred from one mother to another, the baby girl arrived and grew up on black-soiled flatlands blanketed in corn and soybeans; played beneath buckeyes and oaks and maples and stormclouds and tornado sirens; inhaled lilacs and magnolias and honeysuckle and books and art;  walked on eggshells and broken glass and coal slag hills that rose suddenly from the plain like impotent volcanoes; soaked in rote prayer and shame and incense and superstition; drew horses, wrote stories, painted landscapes, recited lines, planned escape, and eventually fled, never looking back (knowing the story of Lot's wife, refusing to tempt fate).

Wrapped in baby fat and extra layers of need, transferred from the wasting hometown to rolling hills and vibrant promise, the girl grew more, surrounding herself with Chemists and Accountants and English scholars and Psychologists and Semanticists and Writers and Poets and Drinkers and Witches and Eccentrics and Singers and Gamers and Dreamers; emerging eventually from that chrysalis wearing colorful new wings, unsure how best to use them, she stretched and beat them, slowly--awkwardly--rising and falling in eddys, nudged offcourse by occasional strong winds, moving forward (sometimes imperceptibly) nonetheless.

Wrapped in an ill-fitting grown-up costume, transferred from place to place, partner to partner, job to job, home to home, the woman sits, reflects, writes, glimpsing at the hazy edge of her peripheral vision a glowing half-life of empty pages laid out side by side, one by one, bright and blank, fading into the warm soft mist of a gauzy horizon.

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gorgeous. and i love that you got the punctuation right. xoxoxo
You're not late - I believe she said we had until Sunday..?

And I think your tag should say "with enough punctuation a sentence can be completely unreadable you know." ;-)
I liked this a lot.
Last year, Nanatehay asked OSers to call and leave recordings of their voices that he posted on his blog. I remember listening to the recording of your voice, Denise, and I thought, WHAT A VOICE!

Now I read this and absorb it with the memory of your vocal voice in my head, and it seems so much more powerful than just riveting font displayed on a screen.
Quite fabulous. Melville wrote a sentence that was grammatically correct, yet stretched for more than a page. Thank you for not going Melvillian, though.
rich and tangy.

One of the magic realists from south America wrote a whole novel with one sentence.
You seduced me with the punctuation and tied me down with the three faces of you. The last one was so vividly cinematic I stuck my hand in the dog's mouth reaching for popcorn. rated with exuberance for exceptionality
Now that's how you kick the ass of a writing assignment!

I felt there was an entire book/autobio in there.
I thought this was quite unique, with all that has enveloped you, and what you have enveloped, so well written with so many pages waiting for your ink.

very nice, Denise, I will be back for more.
R
This was entirely worth waiting for. Every single word.
Denise ... I felt every current, every waterfall, every movment of the raft, and in the end, saw a woman, though who may at times feel tossed about, in fact weathered the rapids like a real pro. Well written; well lived {{{R}}}
And, as a whole, it tells of your brilliance. Great stuff.
Wow. Each sentence so different in mood - though I did notice a recurring image: being blanketed, covered, surrounded, wrapped - and ending in a gauzy horizon... + I'd have to quote it all back to you to say what I loved best.
Gasp! So true. So you!
I love you.
(rated)
Oh! And the pic at top? None can do you justice, but...avatar, perhaps? I'm just saying...
"Wrapped in an ill-fitting grown-up costume" Loved the whole thing.
I love this because it is about you, that first sentence is fun to read, and damn you can punctuate.
damn, this is fine Verbal
Oh my. This one is exceptional._r
fully felt and nicely done.

I personally would hate to be Surrounded by Semanticists, although as Dave Barry used to say, it would make a great band name.
I love this new avatar photo....very iconic. and that first sentence is, as all that you write, extraordinary.