wakingupslowly

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wakingupslowly

wakingupslowly
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June 17

JUNE 26, 2009 12:34AM

we eke out our time (nine lines)

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we eke out our time

together

 

lust, like, desire, even love

we mete out  s  l  o  w  l  y

 

all we don’t know about

each other remains

safe in the future, like

presents wrapped and waiting

for birthdays still years off

 

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Lovely. An answer to Marvell's To His Coy Mistress.
"Like presents waiting"

- And is there anything else worth opening and loving!...

Rated and loved for memories of childhood pulled kicking and screaming to adulthood...

peece!
dj
The joys of patient discovery, peeling away one layer at a time. Makes me wish I were more gifted with patience...sometimes.
Or, as the Pointer Sisters sang, "I want a lover with a slow hand."
Thanks for reading, all.

This is an old poem, almost a decade.

I think I finally finished it last night. (Talk about a slow hand!)
From a fellow eker together yet very much alone... so glad to have found your eloquence
I LOVE this! Perfect description of how the best is often yet to come.
"we eke out our time

together"

I love this expression. You have a unique way of saying quite a bit with very few words.
I prefer the quiet reassurance of the piece. . .for it is there.
awwwww, thanks for reading, all. Your comments feel very good today.

I may try to fit this little poem into a longer poem I'm working on, if I can figure out what that one is about...maybe someday you'll see these words again in another piece.

Is it plagiarism if I do it to myself?
Really Beautiful...I like Lisa Kern's interpretation...
"...when the best is yest to come..."
Thanks, lia-anne. I like your way of looking at this.
Wow...your 'slow hand' is pretty incredible. Rated
Ralph, I love it when you stop by.

Thank you.
This is the good stuff.
Thanks, Scupper. Nine lines that encompass many, many years of friendship.
A fine poem, though I guess I still recommend speaking what needs speaking in the now, not later, since life is full of twists and turns and it's better not to leave things unsaid. That may interfere with the drama of things, but...
Actually Kent, the time has passed. We seemed to have decided to never speak it. But, I think somehow we both still know.
I wish I was qualified to comment on your poetry, but all I can do is rate it and appreciate it. Beautiful. All that sweet anticipation...
Dana, no qualifications necessary to comment! Well, maybe except reading the poem, and you did and you got it. Perfect.
Thanks much.
Awesome advice, Waking! My post was all about the mock but you actually waded into the fray with cogent points and sound reasoning. I know it's a lame and well-trod compliment but Kudos to you!
My post got transferred here for some reason so now I feel like I'm having that dream about nudity and freshman homeroom so now I'll run to my locker because I know there must be some gym-strip in there... Nifty poem by the way. Stop staring! Haven't you guys seen a naked 13 year-old before?
Your poems always make me feel something.
Sometimes that something, is difficult to face.
LOVE this. I'm so impatient...and it sometimes seems so weird and scary to not know all about someone. But, when you put it like this...ahhh...It makes me look at it quite differently. Thank you.
Thanks, j lynne. I'm really glad you liked it.

And it really did happen just like this. So slowly. Sometimes, agonizing slowly, but I gave into trusting that I couldn't control or even make an impact on the pace. It had to be how it was.
Waking, it's the giving in to trusting part that I have a problem with. I'm envious that you've been able to do it. I'm working on myself though! Guess I need more time...
j lynne, It helped that my friend as clear with me, "I'm not going anywhere." So, we had time, almost a decade to learn and gro into our friendship.

This is the same friend about whom I wrote the poem ,"Because I Don't Think He Will Ever See This". Things are changing now.
Oh my. I just read it. How horrible. I can only imagine how you feel. To move so slowly towards....who knows what....and then to have him leave. Before you ever arrived. It's heartbreaking. I'm so sorry.