wakingupslowly

JULY 6, 2010 10:26AM

What Your Son Did This Weekend at My House

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He's your boy, and my daughter seems to

care for him, as much as one 21 year old cares

for another, both slack and profound,

all at once, like a bungee cord wrapped tightly

around the body. After the jump from the bridge,

the limp cord appears, ready to pull and dangle.

 

My house is not an easy place to visit lately, with

an old senile dog who guards shadows and his

hallucinations, making a full night’s sleep a

has-been dream.  (Your boy didn’t complain.) Not

peaceful, I wander about at night, too, and sit

on the back porch or in the dark living room.

The dog's yelps provide good cover for such

early morning  restiveness. 

 

He told me about your long lost pets, a neighborhood

feud, and funny stories of your family vacations. I

learned things I bet you wouldn’t want me to know

just yet, if ever. (It’s okay. I understood what you

meant when you once told his teenage brother

you could “happily leave him at Disney Land.”)

 

On Friday afternoon a young man I didn’t know

died in a freak car accident up the street from me.

Your son held the water-filled vase in my front

yard as I cut stems of purple coneflowers, black-eyed

Susans, and white and purple Bee Balm.

He was the one to place the vase there against

the fence where the young man crashed and instantly

died two days before. Our flowers joined another

bouquet to sit in reverence while the rain washed

away the stains in the flattened grass.

 

One day in to his visit, I asked him to help

me. “Please,” I said. “I need to trim that shrub,

the one that thinks it’s a tree. Will you help?” 

I ignored my daughter’s rolling eyes and smiled

when he leaped up. He sliced the too high

branches, the ones I struggle with every year. When

he was done, my daughter said, “Mom, thanks

for asking him. He likes to help out.”  I know,

dear girl, I know. (His parents raised him that way.)

 

 

front yard

 

 

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Oh, I have missed you! This is stellar. You fuse the different subjects together so beautifully. I'm a terrible commenter right now, and can't express how truly stunning this is. xo
I've always always thought two 20 year olds beat one 40 year old any day...
i'm with aim. the words just aren't coming for me this morning, even for a comment, but they sure did for you. i hope this is true. i love boys like that.
" both slack and profound"...a sentiment not slack, purely profound... and I loved the photo.
I thought you were gone!!!... .. great perspective... perfect story.
I hope that someday someone will describe my boys this way.

Excellent post. Your words warmed my heart.
How nice you could ask him, that he could help you, and that your daughter could tell you.

Nice to see you back.
Rated. Sounds like your daughter has great taste.
Beautiful. Teenage boys don't get enough poems written about them. He sounds like a keeper.
Wonderful story, I hope it all true. This is excellent writing, loved it. r_
Humble offerings provide a beautiful experience here. What a great weekend, thanks for sharing!
I've missed you. This young man sounds like a mensch._r
I could -- and surely will -- read this again and again. Gorgeous!
How wonderful to see you again. What a lovely post, one that communicates so much in so few words.
Rated
I was expecting something different and was amazingly happy to see a lovely young man emerge. Glad your daughter has him for a friend.
Reminds me of when my daughter brought home the boy she was eventually going to marry. My then husband asked him to help clean the gutters! LOL This is wonderful! She found a good one, Mom. You obviously raised her that way!
Wow. That's all I've got, but I mean it.
Lovely. But my sons were home this weekend. A doppleganger? R
I completely loved this: you let us see his character, little by little, and brought us back to the message. Lovely.
That's quire lovely, both the story and the writing. I like this young man :-)
This is my first time reading you, but it will surely not be the last! Your prose are beautiful and the imagery is all the more poignant with your lovely picture included.
Thank you.
R-
What a lovely bit of writing -- this is exactly how a blog is supposed to be -- uplifting and wonderful!
That's fantastic; I'm so glad your daughter met a "good one." They're pretty rare. How touching that he helped you with the flowers for the young man in the accident that neither of you knew.
I really liked the first stanza and this poem's overall subject. I like the contrast between him and your daughter here as well...few of us who are parents have not witnessed the "kid behaves wonderfully at someone ELSE'S house" phenomenon.
Oooh, wonderful. Why aren't you a favorite of mine? I'll fix that. :)
Sooooo nice to see you back. And this was absolutely lovely. Just lovely.
~R~
A lovely bit. And that is easily my son whose girlfriend, unfortunately bears too little resemblance to your daughter.
Beautiful account of this boy. Kindness and helpfulness for no reward..priceless. great!
So glad to see you back!!
Lovely warm writing, uplifting on our rainy day we're having here today.
It's nice to still be able to think that some parents do their job and raise a child the right way and expect nothing in return, except unconditional love.
Thank you, sweet readers. You are very kind to me.

My apologies for not responding sooner and individually. Within an hour of posting this I developed a fever and body aches. Can barely prop myself up even now.

oh, for the commenter who hoped this was all true, yes. Yes, it is. I did leave out a few things, of course, because "good writing is all about what we leave out", yes? One thing, after he helped with the shrub trimming, my daughter whispered to me, "You're lucky he didn't shape that thing into some sort of animal, like a squirrel. Once he gets a tool in his hands.... anything can happen."
So good to see you again. This was wonderful. having 3 20-something girls i can defintily identify. Especially the eye-rolling when you ask one of the boyfriends for help. But I figure that's one of the perks of raising 3 girls, right?
Such a wonderful young man, your daughter has picked well. I'm sure his parents would love to hear how you feel.
So glad you came back! I have missed you...
From the time he was 18, our now 23-year-old grandson brought his (then 17-year-old) girlfriend with him on trips to visit us in Florida, and I would have this young woman under our roof as a houseguest without ever a note or a phone call from her parents, had never met them, and had similar thoughts. Did they know what she was doing, saying, being in our home? This was an interesting read.
I am smiling... at the words... at the welcome. (here and there)
A cornucopia of emotions, observations, images (both beautiful and tragic) and action compactly rendered in the equivalent of a poetic trailer for a feature film. Somebody amazing should be playing you. Wonderfully done.
I'm so glad you're here and so glad that you have this young man in your life and your daughter's.
Big hug, dearie!
this is such a wonderful and touching story. glad to see you back.
Thank you for reading, sweethearts. Thank you.
Fucking beautiful, full of grace, and so good to read . . . Oh yeah - and good to see you around again! (we've missed you)
I am so at battle awareness with my maturing kids, I reacted to your title in an entirely different way...Such a great story about a good guy. Your daughter chose well, apparently.
Can't tell you enough how thrilled I am to hear your voice again, my dear. This is full of spots of color, love, sadness, and--as always with you--generosity of heart. (I'm also pleased to see that the boy has some Edward Scissorshands in him. . . . )

A skillful telling. Thank you.
Ah Waking.. this is wonderful :).

A touch of melancholy.. and a touch of acceptance.

Rated for good to see you again!
Do you even have any idea how good it is to have you back. You breathe life here...always.
This is a lovely story and it's no surprise that your daughter is wise...
Have I mentioned that I miss you here?? :-)
Welcome back. This is a lovely piece -- I hope I can write it myself in a few years (daughter is too young just yet).