Wordsmith

Wordsmith
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Mother, daughter, writer, friend. Seen more than a bit of the world, but keep returning to the place I feel most at home. Have owned restaurants, documented software, joined a circus. Whatever I post here will probably fit into that fairly wide framework.

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Food for Thought...
APRIL 16, 2009 10:31PM

Dissonance (revised)

Rate: 6 Flag

Still working on it, but I'm afraid it isn't getting any lighter...

 

Disconnected
Disjointed
Left unanointed—
No soothing balms
To clean the wounds
Or coat the raw and open pain
To ease the caustic sting again.

Disaffected
Dispossessed
No devotion professed—
Left to discover
A faith less restrictive
Devoid of crosses or crutches
Much less scripture and stricture.

Dejected
Disaffected
Destined to be rejected—
Analyses proffered
Yet still left unsupported
Contacts without substance
Looped noise and a filter.

Dependent
Despondent
Sentiments so repugnant—
All genuine feeling
Subsumed by the varnish
Of public acclaim
Fleeting fame quickly tarnished. 

Solitary

 

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dark corners of the soul, work in progress, poetry, not haiku

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Very dark. Introspective?
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Long Gone...
April 16, 2009 10:42 PM
getting lighter or not, wordsmith couldn't be a more accurate name. this is amazing!
nanatehay
April 16, 2009 10:44 PM
Do NOT patronize me! Or you. Or, for fuck's sake, ANYONE!
JessBabbling
April 16, 2009 10:54 PM
Oh! One more thing: Rated for making me think.
JessBabbling
April 16, 2009 10:55 PM
KoB: Reflective. Introspective. The flip side of the coin, one might say...
Wordsmith
April 16, 2009 10:56 PM
nanatehay: Thank you for the kind words. I sometimes lose people with the darker stuff.
Wordsmith
April 16, 2009 10:57 PM
JB: I don't tend to be the patronizing sort... And thank you for thinking about it.
Wordsmith
April 16, 2009 10:58 PM
To be clear, wordsmith, I don't think the poet(ess) is patronizing the reader, but has, instead, felt patronized, used, whatever. Still may be way off the mark, but that was my point.
JessBabbling
April 16, 2009 11:03 PM
JB: Following you much more clearly now. "Patronized" is not a word that had crossed my mind, but it fits remarkably well into the related vocabulary list... I appreciate the insight.
Wordsmith
April 16, 2009 11:09 PM
In reading these words of another, I cannot help but identify my own subjective shadow therein. You've captured something here... it dances in the moonlight, slow and methodical, weighted by leaden impressions of reflection. Lurching towards an icy, cloud-veiled sun, the barren tree yet plunges its roots.

From here, it is the complexity of personality shedding skin. Well done, and I urge you to "work in progress"!
Joshua Michael
April 16, 2009 11:29 PM
Abandoned maybe, that's what I felt. Very much a Wordsmith, rated.
SJHahn
April 16, 2009 11:34 PM
There is so much to this. I will be thinking about these words.
Thank you.
rated for strength
ladyfarmerjed
April 16, 2009 11:36 PM
Joshua: It is heartening to know that my words speak to others. When I work on the "harder" pieces, it sometimes feels like throwing words into the void. I "get" them, but I am never entirely certain it is anything beyond mental self-gratification.
I very much like your description: "... it dances in the moonlight, slow and methodical, weighted by leaden impressions of reflection." That does very much capture the mood of it.
Thank you for the encouragement.
Wordsmith
April 16, 2009 11:42 PM
SJH: There is a very solitary element to it (in fact, that is what the photo is entitled). And some of that solitude is indeed involuntary...

LadyFarmer: Strength is always welcomed... Thank you.
Wordsmith
April 16, 2009 11:44 PM
I'm pleasedto see that you've made progress on this. It feels much more complete. It is, however, painful for me to read. But, anything that causes one to think is well worth the writing.

(I do have to admit that I had to look up the word, "subsume")
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john walker
April 17, 2009 11:27 AM
JW: Thank you for noticing the evolution. It does feel closer to being complete, though I may still tweak it a bit here and there.
I know it's rather dark, but I kind I do better acknowledging those corners of my soul than trying to ignore them.
Wordsmith
April 18, 2009 08:56 AM
Always enjoy your poetry postings--though perhaps not the right word, or at least inadequate, for this one.
Martin H
April 19, 2009 09:44 AM
Martin, I'm not sure what you could call this: dense word sketch, observation, commentary, introspection. Labels, bah...
Wordsmith
April 20, 2009 07:49 AM